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    Black hole.

    I've lost something,
    Can you help me find it?

    It aches when I'm sad
    Races when I'm happy.
    Stops when I'm scared.

    It's my heart,
    Can you help me look?

    It's been fractured,
    Then broken.
    The fragments scattered.

    The pieces, the fragments,
    Will you help me put them togather again?

    Each piece sharp like broken glass,
    Can you be delicate and take care,
    To make sure you don't break it further?

    My eyes are blank as they stare,
    Because without my heart, my soul isn't there.

    Do you know where those missing pieces went?
    That big black hole that moves with darkness.
    They took their pieces each in turn.

    And they left, left me all alone.
    With this black gaping hole.

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    Re: Black hole.

    A great poem... A great way to express your feelings, touched me really much... You've really done a great work with this one... I'd say it's perfect...

    I'll be waiting for more, but I hope the next one is about someone already putting all those pieces together ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Woo. thanks a ton lasura. I wrote this on the fly lastnight after browsing through the forums. I didn't think about it too terrible much and I must say I'm pleased with how it turned out. I'm glad you liked it too!

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    Re: Black hole.

    Mad props, Chan. ^_^
    You did very well with this one. It made me think... a lot.
    Way to go! Anywho I'll see ya later. ^_^


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    Thanks Sprout. I am glad you liked it that makes me proud. I rather liked this one too.

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