I like the way you captured the idea of there being two sides to the situation. Looking into the loneliness and sadness of loving someone and seeing them cry while wishing for everything to be turned around so it didn't feel so bad but feel happy.
Although when reading the poem it didn't flow so well because of the variations of lines in the stanza's. It would be nice to see them all either have the same amount of lines or alternate between having two lines in one and then three lines in another.
Overall, the idea's behind the poem came through nicely and emotions where brought to my attention rather well. It was only the stanza's size that let you down a little. I hope to see more of your work Ofeliasfire