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    Blame game

    Keep emotions in check.
    Resentment, the number one offender.
    Don't forget.

    Do what I can to let it pass.
    But, sometimes, I feel like
    connecting foot to an ass.

    It's sad...

    My bad, I probably should add
    the fact that some people are mad
    at the traits I once had.

    I'd like to blame my dad.
    But if I had, I wouldn't care
    to try to make folks glad.
    I'd just stay inside my sketch pad.

    It's full circle.

    Resentments bruise
    and leave you purple.
    If grudges are the general,
    pain is the colonel.

    It's enough to make a guy
    go back to smokin' herbal.
    Yet, I try to make it up to
    folks, I plan it in my journal.

    Look, ma! Ain't it grand?

    The tornado has ended.
    The damage repaired by this man!
    Not completely finished yet.

    But I hope you understand
    that he's doin' what he can with
    all the power at his command.

    Hold out your hand...

    And I'll give you mine in exchange.
    It may sound strange, but I'm
    entirely committed to change.

    Don't overwork your brain.
    This isn't the same Jermaine.
    He's working the plan that God
    has arranged.

    It sounds insane...

    But Rome wasn't built in a day
    and hope and pray these words convey
    my thoughts that I aim to display.
    I want to make it all right and
    have my debts repaid.

    Let's end this blame game...



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    Re: Blame game

    I liked this because I could tell you put a lot of thought and feeling into it. And it's a lot longer then most pieces you write.
    I didn't care for the rhyme or flow though. It just didn't really work to me and it seemed forced. Aslo, I saw a lot of "I'm trying" in there. Which we aren't doing anymore. You and I, we DO not TRY!!

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Blame game

    It was kind of forced. I had this horrible writer's block for so long, I just needed to squeeze a poem out. LOL. I did say I don't TRY anymore, I DO. But, I couldn't get "Working on" to actually fit in the poem.


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    Re: Blame game

    Keep emotions in check.
    Resentment, the number one offender.
    Don't forget.
    these lines of this poem wow!

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