Blissful moment...

I sat in the middle of my garden and just wanted to memorialize the peace of the moment and here is what came out of it... tell me what's missing? I want to find the secret ingredient...

In the quiet harmony of the day
On a big, green field I lie...
The tender touch of the wind
Takes my worries away...
The sun shining so gently
Warms my cold soul...
The big old oak tree
Watches over me...

I dream away,
Let the bugs walk on my body...
My eye lids... so heavy...
My heart- so calm
I feel at home... At last
Only one thing missing- you...
In this blissful moment...
You're the only one I long for...

Let me fall asleep...
In your arms...

i really really really like this poem.=] its really good.

Aww so sweet. It makes me want to give my boyfriend a big hug lol. Anyway very good poem I give it a 9 and half/10 ^-^

Awww!!!!! Thats so cute and romantic!!!! It's very lovely!!!! I hope to see more! :D:

That was a very romantic poem that you writed before...I love it ...
really it's a nice poem ....hope to see more ..

i thought it was very sweet as well! i thought the flow was nice enough, but i think if it had more rhythm it would have really lent to the piece...

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The big oak tree
Watches over me...

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personally, i think if this kind of flow had kept going, it would have really added to the dream-likeness of your poem!

^o^ good job!

Your poem is very cute. It reminds me of the person I'm missing very much right now. But still it is a good poem.^^

Thank You all very much! ^^ I'm really glad to hear You like this poem!!!
Thank You Cecilia, thank You Kuwi and thank you xxoxx... hmm... you found this poem romantic? Yea... I guess it is...

Oh and a 9 and a half/ 10 from Kelly- truly an honour *bows* Thank You!!! ^^

Thank You Abu for the advice, You're right- rythm would be good...

And sorry for bringing sad feelings AngelFlow...