Thread: Blocks of Life

Life goes in stage like the world revolves around the sun
^s the s is supposed to go after stages.

Life begins anew; as you start resolve the problematic equations
^to the to is to go between start and resolve.

Just a little bit of corrections but other then that your poem is awsome. I liked the part:

Love begins to weave its tangled web of deception to ensnare.
Breaking hearts and allowing love to be captured and cherished
Still someone is there to tell you how they think love should be.

Now you’re on your own and realize how cruel the world can be
You want someone to be there to give you guidance and comfort.
Instead you are cast out of their warm embrace to pain and grief
Forced to make your own decisions you begin to ponder and plan.

Those are the best parts about your whole poem. Keep it up and I can't wait to see the next one.

a very good poem, i like the two middle verse sounds real good, keep it up homey

Ky-lyrra: Thank you for the comments and the corrections that you've spotted out in my poem! I appreciate the critique.

Hellknight: Thanks homey for the awesome comment and I will do my best to contiune writing poems. I wrote this poem for the potw contest in my clan.

Wow,this was really good Fox!! What am I saying,all of your work is awesome!! I really liked this poem of your's cause it express how cruel life can really be.Awesome job as always!

*Hugs Angel* Thank you! I started writing the poem the day I got home from work, and then I saw that we had a potw in the clan so I geared it more toward the potw. But I was really impressed at how it turned out! Thank You for you wonderful comments Angel!

another poem about life thats where the best words come
from expressinh life with a pen or even a laptop or pc your
still showing lifs true intentions and thats what this poem is all
about life can be cruel but you leearn from it and move on.
very awesome poem bro

Hey Bro,

Thanks for the awesome comment! I truly appreciated it and welcome back! As I told you I started to write this poem one day when I came home from work and then I saw potw contest and geared it more toward that! I wrote this poem from the heart and off of personal experiences. I've seen enough things in my life time and to finally put it into words was a major accomplishment for me! Once again thanks bro the the awesome comment!