Bloody Corpse

Sarlinari · Aug 10, 2006, 05:21 AM

Written...well yonks ago to be honest with you =P Basically an overly Religious person (this isn't meant to offend those of you who believe in God) who think he's doing God's work. A dark poem, but i quite like it =)

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You scream and bitch and moan and cry,
I’ll crawl through hands, chest and thigh.

In your mind you just won’t take,
What I have to give, be it true or fake.

I’ll skin you up and eat your flesh,
And raise my hands and God I’ll bless.

Your blood is dripping down my face,
And this is where I change the pace.

I’ll take the dagger and slice your throat,
And your weakening hand let’s free my coat.

Your heart in hand I burn it up,
Then squeeze its juices in devil’s cup.

Your blood empowers every part of me,
And the fact that I let your soul be free.

You should thank the dead that I have done,
And regret ever turning to try and run.

So now I leave your bloody corpse,
Kiss cold lips, ‘bitter sweet’, of course.

tupacs_wifey · Aug 10, 2006, 05:27 AM

its morbid,cynical,and deppressing lol just kiddin i like it

*Innerhell* · Aug 10, 2006, 05:34 AM

That was very pretty.

Simplistic rhyming scheme, but a good poem nonetheless.

*princesslady* · Aug 10, 2006, 07:31 AM

uhhhhhhhhhhhhh.................................... ........
it was dark and a good poem.

Lost_Love · Aug 10, 2006, 10:06 AM

...-dies- I LOVED IT! it made me smile...and that is hard to do these days...it was verry...dark and made me feel warm inside...I am waiting for more...

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Aug 10, 2006, 10:09 AM

very awesome poem you must read
alot of edgar alen poe becuase this is his style
of writing romantic yet dark. you have really done
an awesome job with this your good

Sarlinari · Aug 11, 2006, 12:26 PM

Thanks for the comment guys =D I quite like the poem myself.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Innerhell

Simplistic rhyming scheme, but a good poem nonetheless.

I don't usually do rhyming poems, because i end up screwing it up and needing to replace tons of words just to fit ><; Which i think destroys the 'heart' of the poem. But this is one of the few poems i've done with a rhyming scheme that's actually worked =)

N!tr0-Glyc3r1n · Aug 11, 2006, 01:19 PM

very good and irt ryms!!!!! yay!!!! great job

*Innerhell* · Aug 11, 2006, 01:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sarlinari

I don't usually do rhyming poems, because i end up screwing it up and needing to replace tons of words just to fit ><; Which i think destroys the 'heart' of the poem. But this is one of the few poems i've done with a rhyming scheme that's actually worked =)

I rarely rhyme in my own poems. As long as it flows, it's all good.

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TaurusDemon23 · Aug 11, 2006, 02:01 PM

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Aya-kun · Aug 12, 2006, 06:42 AM

lolz~! this is a wicked poem!!! XD wakakaka~! coola~! ^_^

Aug 10, 2006, 05:21 AM	#1 (permalink)
Sarlinari Newbie Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: London, England Posts: 69 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Bloody Corpse Written...well yonks ago to be honest with you =P Basically an overly Religious person (this isn't meant to offend those of you who believe in God) who think he's doing God's work. A dark poem, but i quite like it =) ------------------------------------------ You scream and bitch and moan and cry, I’ll crawl through hands, chest and thigh. In your mind you just won’t take, What I have to give, be it true or fake. I’ll skin you up and eat your flesh, And raise my hands and God I’ll bless. Your blood is dripping down my face, And this is where I change the pace. I’ll take the dagger and slice your throat, And your weakening hand let’s free my coat. Your heart in hand I burn it up, Then squeeze its juices in devil’s cup. Your blood empowers every part of me, And the fact that I let your soul be free. You should thank the dead that I have done, And regret ever turning to try and run. So now I leave your bloody corpse, Kiss cold lips, ‘bitter sweet’, of course.
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tupacs_wifey Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In My own heart Posts: 441 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 697	Re: Bloody Corpse its morbid,cynical,and deppressing lol just kiddin i like it __________________ HolderOfTheDarkChalice's LiL sis
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Innerhell of the AMC Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: hanging out at Gaia's /amc/ as "[Ih]" Posts: 2,051 Thanks: 0 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 8,015	Re: Bloody Corpse That was very pretty. Simplistic rhyming scheme, but a good poem nonetheless. __________________
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princesslady He loves me not Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: in a castle up north Posts: 1,421 Thanks: 5 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 5,374	Re: Bloody Corpse uhhhhhhhhhhhhh.................................... ........ it was dark and a good poem. __________________
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Lost_Love Newbie Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: I don't live anywhere, the only place I can stay safe in is the head atop my shoulders Posts: 79 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Bloody Corpse ...-dies- I LOVED IT! it made me smile...and that is hard to do these days...it was verry...dark and made me feel warm inside...I am waiting for more... __________________ there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,202	Re: Bloody Corpse very awesome poem you must read alot of edgar alen poe becuase this is his style of writing romantic yet dark. you have really done an awesome job with this your good __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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N!tr0-Glyc3r1n Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: where ur not Posts: 290 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 403	Re: Bloody Corpse very good and irt ryms!!!!! yay!!!! great job __________________ thank u SasuraiHell go -=NOOBZ=- clan!
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Aya-kun Stray Sheep Join Date: May 2006 Location: Malaysia Posts: 905 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 1 Post Credits: 6,613	Re: Bloody Corpse lolz~! this is a wicked poem!!! XD wakakaka~! coola~! ^_^ __________________ +Blog's MOVED -- Find sheep at Paper Diaries Now!+
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