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    Bloody Corpse

    Written...well yonks ago to be honest with you =P Basically an overly Religious person (this isn't meant to offend those of you who believe in God) who think he's doing God's work. A dark poem, but i quite like it =)

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    You scream and bitch and moan and cry,
    I’ll crawl through hands, chest and thigh.

    In your mind you just won’t take,
    What I have to give, be it true or fake.

    I’ll skin you up and eat your flesh,
    And raise my hands and God I’ll bless.

    Your blood is dripping down my face,
    And this is where I change the pace.

    I’ll take the dagger and slice your throat,
    And your weakening hand let’s free my coat.

    Your heart in hand I burn it up,
    Then squeeze its juices in devil’s cup.

    Your blood empowers every part of me,
    And the fact that I let your soul be free.

    You should thank the dead that I have done,
    And regret ever turning to try and run.

    So now I leave your bloody corpse,
    Kiss cold lips, ‘bitter sweet’, of course.

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    its morbid,cynical,and deppressing lol just kiddin i like it

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    That was very pretty.
    Simplistic rhyming scheme, but a good poem nonetheless.
    I love my girlfriend.

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    uhhhhhhhhhhhhh.................................... ........
    it was dark and a good poem.

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    ...-dies- I LOVED IT! it made me smile...and that is hard to do these days...it was verry...dark and made me feel warm inside...I am waiting for more...
    there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    very awesome poem you must read
    alot of edgar alen poe becuase this is his style
    of writing romantic yet dark. you have really done
    an awesome job with this your good
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    Thanks for the comment guys =D I quite like the poem myself.
    Quote Originally Posted by Innerhell
    Simplistic rhyming scheme, but a good poem nonetheless.
    I don't usually do rhyming poems, because i end up screwing it up and needing to replace tons of words just to fit ><; Which i think destroys the 'heart' of the poem. But this is one of the few poems i've done with a rhyming scheme that's actually worked =)

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    Re: Bloody Corpse

    very good and irt ryms!!!!! yay!!!! great job


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