Thread: Book Of Eterinty

I think you've had the Fushigi Yuugi concept embedded in your head, far too long Shini. lol. ^_^

A nice poem nonetheless.

Torn to peices
Pages just discared
Pages torn to thousands of peices
A precious book thrown to the floor

^ My favourite quote. Good repetition with 'Torn' - it sends the audience an idea of 'Loss' and un-acknowledgement.
To be honest I like your other works better, but this is good also.

i like it.
im bored.lol

hmm....i noticed some spelling mistakes u can edit it! arua- "AURA"

A bright arua fills the room with light

this poems gives out a strange and mysterious feeling to readers ! me like

Thanks Reese And yes I know.I was just writting whatever came 2 mind that day lol

Thanks Setsuna Happy that you liked it

And thanks for showing me that Elie And i'm very happy that you liked it

I like this one also. I mean, I'd say this the type of music I'd listen to.

this poem was great it reminds me
of an rpg not to take away from the poem
but it really did i liked this alot

It's interesting but I have a few beefs with it.
1. It doesn't rhyme or flow at all.
2. A few minor spelling errors and I think a few grammar ones as well.
3. It's rather generic.

I can't get too much on you cuz' I've been guilty of all three of those things countless times. It's a very good beggining to some kind of fantasy story, or just plain cool as far as I'm concerned. Give it rythm because that can make or break a poem. Rhyming is something that has come naturally to me and it can be tricky even at the best of times, but it can seriously make a poem shine my friend, and you've got quite a vocabulary to work with.