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    Bottled pain

    Everyday, it seems that I have more pain bottled up inside.
    With this pain, I gan energy,
    With this energy I gain the ability to get things done.
    Unlike othersmy pain becomes my strive to get positive things done.

    With each passing month I havemore and more pain bottled within
    This converter.
    The more I get the more is done.
    One thing I do to keep this in check is control the amount of anger that I put To work.

    This is a difficult task and when my restraints fail,
    The seal is broken and on goes the music.
    Music, why does this calm me down?
    Why does it help me gain control?
    why does it release anger and let me see thigs different?

    Why am I so concentrated on music when I am angry, mad, or just to "full"?
    I have these questions but not one of them are answered, Why?
    Do I have to figure it out on my own?
    Why when you have questions do you never get an answer?


    So little time, So much to figure.
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    Re: Bottled pain

    I just love this poem... though it scares me a bit... You're ok? It's no good to botte up pain and anger... I know it very well...
    The poem is really good, I enjoyed reading it... Has a lot of emotion in it... It's just great, nothing wrong in it I could find...
    A great work Ichigo!!!

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    Re: Bottled pain

    Hmm...using the negative energy and harness it to burn ur spirit... ahh...
    i like the meaning...and the title...bottled pain...really an eyecatching title...


    the poems is good...but u need to ermm..edit the spellings to make it look better ^^

    and theres a lot of questions in there...u must be confused....sheesh

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    Re: Bottled pain

    this is so true anger always brings out the best in
    people if they use it like this and how you use it
    for writingmaking things or anything really , the fact that
    you use the pain for good things lets you wi over that myth
    that anger can never be overcame with good intent.

    it can be if you do it like this i use the method alot
    myself very awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Bottled pain

    I agree with chalice."with great power comes great responcibility" lol...so true.great poem,few spelling errors. cant wait for your next one.
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    Re: Bottled pain

    Eeek!!!! A bit scary and very emotional thats what makes it just simply amazing!!! I love it! I hope to see more of your great poems!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Bottled pain

    Thank you guys I can not say it enough I really appreciate your feedback.
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    Re: Bottled pain

    well certainly is emotional but i still love it great poem love all the emotion as well



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