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    The Boy

    Washboard abs and defined guns
    Open mouths with drool dripping out
    Girls look on with sagging tongues
    The perfect man has just walked by

    With head held high his eyes look forward
    His posture straight as a board
    He looks down on everyone who speaks to him
    Wow what a jerk he really is

    No one seems to know his real behavior
    He shows his true colors to his buddies
    As soon as a cute girl comes around
    A mask is placed a surprise awaits

    The ploy is in play
    He dares to make his move
    Strutting up to have an intrigue
    Ooops, he lost his chance to impress

    His best friend gets to her first
    They start laughing and walk away
    Deep in conversation ignoring him
    Down the hall they go to class

    Anger is boiling just under the surface
    His buddy had known that he had liked her
    Smoothing over his complexion, putting on a smile
    He starts down the hall just behind them

    Watching them closely he sees something pass
    A note, a letter he wants to know what
    He’ll ask his buddy when they hit shop class
    Suddenly he sees something that shouldn’t happen

    They hugged! Right in the middle of the hallway
    He couldn’t believe it
    All his hard work trying to get her attention
    Just shot down, flushed like a toilet

    His anger gets the best of him
    Stomping up behind his friend
    Grabs him by the shoulder
    And roughly turns him around

    “What do you think you are doing?!”
    He yells at his friend
    “You know that I like her!”
    His face red with rage

    Calmly his friend looks at him and says
    “I know that you like her”
    Turning slowly her motions the girl forward
    “Casey this is my best friend Chase”

    “What do you mean best friend?”
    Chase angrily spat
    “After what you just did”
    He stood in contempt waiting for an answer

    “Chase what are you talking about?”
    His friend inquired in confusion
    “You handed her a note of some importance”
    Chase hissed menacingly

    “First off it was cash and not a note”
    His friend plainly stated
    “Secondly Casey is not my friend…”
    As a smile crept across his face

    “Than what is she?”
    Chase asked in slight confusion
    “She’s my sister and the cash was lunch money”
    His friend said and starting laughing
    Why is everything so ****ing hard for me? Keep me down to what you think I should be! Must you tempt me and provoke the ministry? Keep on trying I'm not dying so easily!

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    Re: The Boy

    That poem was real awesome. New poem lover for me! Hope to see more!
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    Re: The Boy

    woah... what a jerk that is xD nice poem

    I am hoping to see more...

    @.@ woah.. im not like that @.@

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    Re: The Boy

    Aww, I was hoping death. Oh well, I really like the flow of this poem, good job ^_^

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    Whoa, that was good I was like wanting to know what happens next. What an embarrasing ending though. Good job!

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    Re: The Boy

    thank you i like to hear comments so i can improve and write more that will get as much positive cristism as this. thank you all
    Why is everything so ****ing hard for me? Keep me down to what you think I should be! Must you tempt me and provoke the ministry? Keep on trying I'm not dying so easily!

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    Re: The Boy

    your poem's great! the ending was totally hilarious...I'll be waiting for your next poem...>.<...


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    Re: The Boy

    ahaha, a typical story lol XD I guessed the ending was that Anyways, the poem story was really enjoying =p Tho quite predictable, not sure whether you took it from a real life experience or anything. The flow of the poem was not bad, nice job

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