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    Break.

    No more suffering.
    Take back the ache.
    She smiled for him.
    He let it break.
    Break.
    Break.

    Her heart he could take.
    Or love they could make.

    Her distrust she did shake.
    And BELIEVED for his sake.

    From sunshine,
    to snake.
    From hope,
    To sin.

    She hurts!
    He wins.

    The room did spin.
    He drew her in.

    His kiss so fake.
    Just filled with hate.
    He loved to watch her.
    Watch her break.
    Break.
    Break.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Break.

    Oh my this poem was so sad. He didn't really love her just loved to watch her suffer how very sad but you did well in describing. Even though it was sad, I loved it hope to see more!^^



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    Re: Break.

    wow. this poem is so sad i cant believe the guy in the poem. he just wanted to see her suffer, i feel so sorry for her. but yet i loved the poem. GREAT JOB keep it up. cant wait to see more.

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    Re: Break.

    hey peach_follows,
    I love your poem ^_^
    I love all your poems
    keep on writing
    and I'll keep on reading ^_^

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    Re: Break.

    wow... love the flow.. nicely done... it's like a song already.. sheesh @.@

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    Re: Break.

    Thank you everybody! And hmmm ... interesting thought you have RayMe, Perhaps it could be the begining of song. To bad I don't know how to go about song writing.
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    Re: Break.

    thats a very sad poem why would he do something like that a kiss should be of love not hatred
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