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    Unhappy breaking

    I’m breaking
    I wonder if you know my heart is breaking
    I hear my heart sing a sad song
    I see my heart shattering
    I want to
    I’m breaking


    I pretend to hate you
    I feel my heart throbbing so much It hurts
    I touch my shattered heart
    I worry about leaving you
    I cry when you are gone
    I’m breaking


    I understand now why you left
    I say I love you for the last time
    I dream of how it could have been
    I try not to cry all the time
    I hope one day you come back
    I’m breaking
    When you walk away
    You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
    Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go

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    Re: breaking

    I'm not liking the repetition in this poem. Another strategy would have been better.
    Seduced by Flesh


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