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    Breathless

    The sky is burning out at a dull
    pink and red.

    Your face is highlighted with
    the early summer's glow.

    Eyes made of melted gold and fallen
    pieces of the sky engulf my bright chocolate spheres.

    Birds dive at the water catching the
    minos brave enough to come to the surface and play.

    The firefiles are pletiful, adding just enough
    light with the moon.

    Darkness slowly wraps its way around our
    entwined figures; we are one.

    My fingers wrapped softly in your
    hair and yours gently holding my face.

    Your lips are a perfect oval of desire
    as my own lock with yours.

    My hand slightly caresses the delicate
    curve of your back.

    Bodies melted into one another,
    the earth we have made our own memory.

    The night air is hot and damp, matting our hair and lighting
    our eyes a fire.

    Gasping, the slight breeze fills our lungs full.

    We are the light in the sky that
    never grows dull.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Breathless

    wipes a tear from eye"" begins to clap" ill go see that if was made into a three second movie and even pay the $7.50 thats comes with it great poem fine work ill be looking for the next one

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    Re: Breathless

    Aww..that so sweet! thank you very much ^-^ and guess what? it took me maybe ten minutes to write it. When I spend two days on a poem it sucks, but when I spend two minutes on a poem...its great. I am so weird 0.o
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Breathless

    Wow!!!! This is just great!!! A wonderful poem... full of blissful love... I adore it!!!! Your poems really are great!!! I'm willing to read more...

    And the description of suroundings... it just makes me dreamy... wonderful!!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Breathless

    Wow! Very excelent job Ofeliasfire! I give this two thumbs up because I really enjoyed it!



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    Re: Breathless

    i guess that means that writing poems on impulse works better for you

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    Yeah I suppose thats right ^-^ I'm not really sure myself, but oh well. What about you...how do you write poems?
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Breathless

    normally while im taking a shower i seem to think better in the bathroom

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