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    A new feeling...breathless...
    Can someone really take your breath away?
    I thought i knew what it meant...
    But i had no idea!
    I wasn't even supposed to be paying attention...
    In the middle of an exam i just had to look up!
    I always seem to have this habit of noticing things i shouldn't.
    It was really hard to concentrate on anything else...
    Maybe he noticed... I hope not... I just couldn't stop staring!
    I usually see him, sexy with his semi-rugged look.
    I hadn't seen him for a couple days...
    I had missed him...but i didn't know i had missed him that much!
    It's normally hard to breathe around him...my heart speeds up...
    Breathless? ... no, i hadn't felt anything yet...
    Clean-shaven in hot red he walked in.
    He became the centre of my world for a moment...
    My heart skipped a beat, and i felt as if someone cut off my oxygen.


    He'll never know...at least i hope he won't...
    Well, just until he feels the same about me



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    *ahem* OK, i'm behaving now... I'd really appreciate if u'd comment, I'd luv 2 hear ur review
    Life's short so have a laugh about it

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    Re: Breathless

    very awesome poem here not letting someone know how
    you feel can be frustrating i know btu your doiing the right thing
    for now , but dont wait to long , this poem really shows how
    falling for someone can be really amazing yet very difficult to
    do anything about.

    this poem was good
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Breathless

    This poem was awesome i agree with HolderOfTheDarkChalice it is frustrating and you don't want to wait to long. I did and she found someone else but that was my fault.
    This poem does show how falling in love can make you feel so very happy but also completely helpless at the same time.
    Great job.

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    Re: Breathless

    Thanks u guys. I really appreciate ur comments.... I would tell him, but i don't think he feels the same about me...and if i do tell him, i really don't want to make him feel obligated to me or nothin.

    To tell you the truth...i know it would hurt if he's with some 1 else, but, i guess i'd be happy once he is.
    Life's short so have a laugh about it

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    Re: Breathless

    I like it! =D
    It seems to, not just express you, but express everyone else who's gone through likeing someone and not saying anything.
    I've done this plenty of times...-__-
    But keep up the work!
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    Re: Breathless

    Apparently confessing was not really a good idea...it didn't work out, and didn't even bother to tell me until a week after he kissed me....heh...life sux sometimes doesn't it?
    Life's short so have a laugh about it

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