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    Breathless For Life

    I wanted to show the many poets of AO what a completed poem looks like. I know my poetry is not the best, nor will it favor with many of you. I just want my fellow poets to take the time and write about something with detail and many literary actions.

    This poem is from my "The Heart of Africa Series". If you enjoyed this preview and would like a piece from the series (or any of my poems) send me a pm.

    Note: I am open and subject to any analytical citicism.

    Breathless For Life

    Arteries and veins gasping for air,
    Choking on Centuries of culture.

    Asphyxiation of the essence
    Leads to death of the soul.

    Smothered in the new,
    All history drained through a wound.

    The proud river of life that was,
    Is now thick and seeping.

    No longer the red blood of love,
    But now the enclosing pitch-dark of death.

    The dried heart of blacks,
    Crumbles beneath the weight of change.


    (c) Kasai, singthesorrow487, L.N. Freeman
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: Breathless For Life

    That's sad, but good if your going for that. More like Scary.
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    Re: Breathless For Life

    idk.i'm not 1 for poems so i dont know if i would be good or not.but it is better than anything i could do,so i guess its pretty good
    I Know With You, Lord
    All Things Are Possible
    I Will Never Lose My Faith And Love For You
    For You Will Never Lose Yours

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    I never knew you were such a decent poet Kasai.
    I like it

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    Very sad kasai


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    Re: Breathless For Life

    pretty kewl ^______________^

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    Thnx guys. With a response like this I'll post more poems.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: Breathless For Life

    pretty good nice poem

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