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    Re: Breathless For Life

    That is mai kasai ray ,
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    Re: Breathless For Life

    Now that is a poem. Tired of hearing roses are red, violets are blue bs. Awesome. Rock on. Just don't fixate too much on using the most complicated word to express yourself.

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    pretty and sad...is tat possible? i like depressing poems!!

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    Quote Originally Posted by Nympho
    Now that is a poem. Tired of hearing roses are red, violets are blue bs. Awesome. Rock on. Just don't fixate too much on using the most complicated word to express yourself.
    The most complicated causes the reader to think. I like for my readers to think.
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    Re: Breathless For Life

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai
    The most complicated causes the reader to think. I like for my readers to think.
    Yes..... the challenge is fun for most, but it might be nice to have an clear yet as good a poem for a change, although this poem is really great.

    And I noticed that some of the comments say that the poem is "sad."

    The feeling I got on this poem was more on the feeling of anger and regret....... and it was expressed really well, especially with the use of the big complicated words ^_^

    Nice poem
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    Re: Breathless For Life

    wow kasai that peom was pretty kool, keep it up.

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    Nice dude, I loved the dark side of the human mind.

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    Re: Breathless For Life

    hey, my only problem is that i had to think about what "Asphyxiation" ment so it slowed the reading and then i lost some of the effect.
    but as a whole good poem, keep up the good work
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