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Reply With Quotei like it. the rhyme was a little inconsistent but it's really good. it has a good point and i like how you put those words together they really are good rhymes. i liked it i'm pretty sure that a lot of people can sympathize with this poem.
Stupid Girl!
Stop crying!
Stop wishing...
For him to be sympathetic!
You cant cry out any louder.
You cant be more pathetic!
Even your friends tell you,
they dont think you love yourself.
Sitting around waiting
to get pulled down off the shelf.
You kept your pride hidden.
In the only thing left that was yours alone.
And you just gave it all away.
Can't take it back now... its gone.
You let it happen.
You knew it felt wrong.
And everyone around you,
knew just what was goin' on.
They tried to stop it.
But you werent tryin' to hear their rants.
And you have nothing to show for it.
Except perhaps a passing glance.
Years spent waiting for that moment.
But it felt just like shaking hands.
You didnt just make expectations...
you made plans.
2 and a half years of abstinence...
...broken...
Probably the first in a future streak of one night stands.
But who can you blame?
Did you really think sh*t would change?...
And now, you have no pride...
...doesn't that feel strange?
Write your poems.
Because you're too frail for these words to be spoken.
He'll try to fix the whole world.
Before he'll fix what he's broken.
Might as well go out and make yourself
Another man's token.
All you had.
All you'll ever have...
Its Broken.
Last edited by Peach_follows; Jul 18, 2007 at 09:02 PM.
... Not Ever Again...
i like it. the rhyme was a little inconsistent but it's really good. it has a good point and i like how you put those words together they really are good rhymes. i liked it i'm pretty sure that a lot of people can sympathize with this poem.
*snaps* loved it chica! sweet and with meaning. loved how it rhymed. go head on now
Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen
Love it >< Me<- fan here
*screams for autograph* ^^ Well, I really thought the last 2 phrases was a "HIT". You let it trail off and ending it with "Broken" .. Overall I like the storyline(what happened to you sayin u wanna chg to a diff theme?)
But yeah.. still hoping to see something new from u ^^
This poem wasnt supposed to have much structure, I needed it to sound crazy... to sound panicy... because thats how I felt. The fact that it rhymed is only because I have a hard time NOT rhyming.Originally Posted by sangogirl
I never see you on here! Hows that manga business comin' along? Im gonna go hit up your profile riiiiiggght now!
Ha ha ha... change my theme... ha ha ha. There always seems to be something more to touch on when it comes to this "topic".
... Not Ever Again...
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