Burning

"Woman heats up like an iron,
Man like an electric light."
It's true, it's true;
I burn for you.
You keep me warm at night.

A fire burns most brightly
before you are plunged into dark.
Do you? You, too?
I always knew
Your bite was worse than your bark.

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It's short, I know. Other than that, how was it?

(Quote by Fr. Callum, the most crazy, ADD, old English priest I know)

It's short but good. You make a very good point between men and women. That almost sounds like a taunt at the end of it.lol Good job keep up the good work.

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Originally Posted by fireandice

It's short but good. You make a very good point between men and women. That almost sounds like a taunt at the end of it.lol Good job keep up the good work.

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Thanks. I guess it was a bit of one. :laugh: Fr. Callum is a BAMF.

i really like this poem. i also like how you made the point between woman and men. GGood JOB!! =)

woman... bites.... :rolleyes1: :laugh:

I did not like the ending much... but this part...
"A fire burns most brightly
before you are plunged into dark.
Do you? You, too?"

i love the methaphore there man.. it was sweet~! nicely done @.@

Keep it up man :D Love it ^^

sounds like a useless candle to me...

@ Bautifulsoul - Thanks! The distinction is important to make! We are so different!

@ RayMe - Thanks, man. The last line was actually an inside joke with a friend of mine. :laugh: But I do appreciate everything!