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    C0ld

    She loves.
    And She hurts,
    She stay in this dirt.
    But that isn't what they see...

    If nothing more than crazy.
    Or easy.
    That was so damn easy.
    Didn't please him,
    Believe me.

    Please be....
    Gentle,
    Dont give her something
    She cant hold on to.
    Dont play with her id...
    her dying id,
    Sees something more in the things that they did.
    At least pretend to be knid.

    Leave her alone with whats left of her mind!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Owning a pain that a poem can't define.
    If given a chance... Push rewind...
    Or fast foward.

    To skip where she put too much love toward.
    Someone who would rather cut the cord.
    Unanswered questions that leave her floored.
    All that she wanted was someone to adore.
    To have love fill her soul.

    He didn't want it but he played the role.
    They couldn't stop her so they'll never know.
    They always assumed that it was a show.
    Until she was cold.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: C0ld


    i like the it was written and although i can't say for sure what it's about i feel like i have been in a similar situation... It has such feelings, emotions... i like it^_^

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    Re: C0ld

    I like this poem. I can't put my finger on what excatily it reminds me of something. I do like how they are pretending to like each other and then she wounds up not feeling anything any more. You have a lot of emotions in this poem. Can't wait to read more from you.

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    Re: C0ld

    I like it! ^.^

    And the way you wrote it. Just brillient.

    I love it alot.
    And I hope to see more of your work.

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    Re: C0ld

    aww this poem is quite sad ans confusing at the same time but it is awsome geat job i would like to see more^^

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    i agree with equinn very sad poem but i like how you wrote it. cant wait to see more kk?keep it ↑ ♥~*The Princess*~♥
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    Re: C0ld

    Thank you all ^^, I like that this confused the reader... it was not intended, but its fine by me that it turned out that way... Afterall, the feeling behind the girl in the story is ...confusion.

    @ice viper, I love how you interpreted this. Seems maybe you saw past the confusion a bit.

    Thanks again all for taking the time to read and give feedback.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: C0ld

    yea i liked your poem, kinda long tho but still i enjoyed reading it^^ good job
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