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    Re: Calm

    nice and sweet, it creates a warm feeling inside... good job... keep it up...

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    wow man, that was pretty dark kool, keep up the awesome kool work.

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    Re: Calm

    Critique will be given.

    The first verse of the stanza ended the poem for me.

    This is calm
    the cherryblossom in my palm
    the breeze of the wind
    I dont feel pined
    Being free to think my thoughts
    Thinking of what has been tought
    Poems DO NOT have to rhyme. This would have been a pretty poem without the failed attempt at rhyming.
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