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    It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    I thought you were just like me,
    And for awhile we lived in hamony,
    You and I, both unique,
    But I never knew that it'll change.

    I thought we were perfect for each other,
    When we found one another.
    When we came,
    To my heart cupid's arrow aimed.

    It came through mine,
    Bounced off yours,
    I thought it would be fine,
    And that we'll go through the same doors,
    But it came through mine,
    And bounced off yours.

    I truly loved you,
    But I guess you thought I wouldn't do,
    So you left me alone,
    and I felt locked in a dome,
    I loved you and

    I thought we were perfect for each other,
    When we found one another.
    When we came,
    to my heart cupid's arrow aimed.

    It came through mine,
    Bounced off yours,
    I thought it would be fine,
    And that we'll go through the same doors,
    But it came through mine,
    And

    It came through mine,
    Bounced off yours,
    I thought it would be fine,
    And that we'll go through the same doors,
    But it came through mine,
    And bounced off yours.

    Feel free to post your thoughts ppls!!

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    Re: It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    not really my style but still cool.

    thanks to zyta for the sick sig and avy!

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    Re: It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    hey good job! i really like it, keep it up!
    Quote Originally Posted by writer92 View Post
    It came through mine,
    Bounced off yours,
    I thought it would be fine,
    And that we'll go through the same doors,
    But it came through mine,
    And bounced off yours.
    ^ i really liked this stanza, but i dont know if you should have repeated it twice in the end.
    but 2 thumbs up!
    You laugh at me because I'm different. I laugh at you because your all the same.

    Thanks Hieislove for the siggy!

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    well its actually supposed to b a song of mine. i make up my own songs and sing them. i dont have fans but i have something just as annoying. classmates. lol.

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    Re: It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    Cool!!! I totally like it!!!
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    Re: It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    I liked it ^^ Good lyrics

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    Re: It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    okay first off this one doesn't need stanzas. it killed half of what made it good because you left part or the last line in each stanza for a continuation. that kills the rythm, work on breaking that habit and it would be a lot better.

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    Re: It Came Through Mine (Bounced Off Yours)

    btu still great poem keep up the work


    thank u SasuraiHell
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