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Reply With Quotewow that was a wicked poem. At glance, i get the feeling that this poem involves your mommy trying to kill you when you were a baby, something like that. It was a well written poem and i look forward to see more of your poems. ^^
I hate being here
I swear I do
Because everything I do
Is never good enough for you
You never tell me you love me
And I really start to be believe
That every time I breathe
You wish death upon me
In my mind I swear I think
You tried to kill me as a baby
Probably when I was only a week
I know I am not Einstein
Or can ever compare to his mind
But can you blame me
For being all I could ever be
My voice is my comfort and
And you tried to make me speechless
I bet when I die
You wont even miss
Goodbye now
And good bye forever
I am so sorry
I was ever your daughter
Shippo is determined to become a lvl higherI'm a solider of Pen and Paper!<3 Atomik_Sprout <3
wow that was a wicked poem. At glance, i get the feeling that this poem involves your mommy trying to kill you when you were a baby, something like that. It was a well written poem and i look forward to see more of your poems. ^^
Oh wow there is soo much emotion to it. I love it.
I like how at the begining the lines are short giving it a faster pase then they get bigger to slow it down and then short again.
I think it gives it the riight flow. Very good work.
Keep it up.
Wow Shippo, you really have a way with words...my meaning behind that is you captured the feeling of not being love like moving to a new place and no one really knows you or care to know anything about you. I understand how suffocating love can be and to be quite honest dating is even over rated! Great usage of words and emotins to make this poem come to life! I hope you continue to post more in the near future.
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