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    Can you see?

    Look at this face and tell me what you see
    Can you tell if its the real me?
    Can you see the hurt and all that pain?
    That all too often makes me feel I'll never laugh again.
    Do you see my big light brown eyes
    and fall for my clever disguise?
    The happy and friendly jovial and caring little girl
    When the thoughts in my head boil and swirl.
    Like unhappy tidal waves full of anguish and exauhstion.
    When you look at it life has just bairly begun.
    Or can you look beyond the smile creases at the corners of my eyes and realize
    It's nothing but a slick guise.
    Can you -see- the pain and mistrust?
    My heart, like the tinman is covered in rust.
    From all the tears and nights spent crying
    All the days I felt like dying.
    But I didn't have the -courage- then.
    And hopefully never will again.
    But this one, he suprises me.
    Could this be?
    Some one who sees the real me.

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    Re: Can you see?

    Oh wow what a touching poem! I loved it cause it's something like being lost but found! Good job I really hope to see more!



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    Re: Can you see?

    Hmm... I wonder which one we could be talking about here. *puts finger on chin*

    Very good poem, Chan. ^_^ It's been a while since you put anything up, I was wondering when you were gonna post some new writing. Good work! ^_^


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    Re: Can you see?

    Thank you both for the comments. I'm glad you liked it Akura. It's probably one of the least depressing things I've written...ever. So I'm proud of it.

    I haven't been writing much lately. I haven't been doing much at all lately. The depression is beyond the point of being able to express it. It's fallen into the painfully listless catagory.

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