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    can you stay?

    Why cant anything go right
    everything was going well
    until one dark night
    I come home
    a night of fun and pleasure
    to a home of supposed love
    the amount i cannot measure
    but I am greeted with yelling
    curses to my very name
    You yell and scream
    filling me with shame
    Now your leaving
    theres nothing I could do
    I cant live like this
    I need to prove it to you
    can you stay
    please dont go
    dont want to
    be alone
    stay with me please dont go
    i got so much to say so
    please dont leave
    i'll die if you go away
    please dont leave
    who will be there to wipe away all my tears
    i'm all alone
    who will save me from all of my fears
    i'm all alone
    stay with me please

    can you stay?
    please?
    fear the reaper

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    Re: can you stay?

    This poem is beautiful...
    -Wipes tears away-...
    It touched me right away...
    Really I liked it...
    Keep it up...^_^....
    We are affraid of losing controle...But why should you be affraid of losing it...While you didnt have it...

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    Re: can you stay?

    thanks that means alot...seriously, that means alot to hear someone else likes my work
    fear the reaper

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    Re: can you stay?

    Nah It's okay...
    I like a lot of works from you..^_^...
    But yeah your right..
    It means alot when someone likes your work...
    It gives a feeling that you did something good...
    Am I right..??
    We are affraid of losing controle...But why should you be affraid of losing it...While you didnt have it...

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    Re: can you stay?

    awesome poem leaving someone can be so easy when that line
    has been crossed it really makes you think what is anyone's limit
    when enough is enough , that is what i am getting from the poem
    anyway its sad yet theres a chance for a new beginning by asking
    them to stay though a lot of the time all you getin reply is a slammed door....

    i like this poem very much though very awesome
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    dude yeah the poem is meaning full and aldough i had tot read it multiple time to understand it it is verry nice

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    Re: can you stay?

    Nice poem Demonicloud but you could try making some space between the lines, i think i could be easier to read then, that's the only thing i can see, that could be improved, but you are the creater, it's your call ^^ so a really good poem keep it up.. up.... up

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