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    ''Cant go on without u''

    Im so alone thinking were u go
    thinking about u
    I know u've been fooled
    but what elss we can do
    to think about both of us
    i wish i could store ur smiles in my heart.
    the only times that were so long
    it could make me belive
    what could tomorrow could be
    when today is so low
    were u could go?
    does it really matters were we go?
    I can't go on
    i got to be besides u
    my heart has been crushed
    beliving that u would return soon
    i must love
    i must have u soon
    what am i without u
    can it be to late to tell u how much i want u home?
    ''What u would say
    if i find u
    are the feelins alright
    can i hold on all the way
    what could u be thinking now?''
    i wanna love
    i cant go with u
    i nothing without u
    can we meet face to face
    or is it to late to tell u that with out u
    '' I cant go onnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn''



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: ''Cant go on without u''

    wwwoooowww.........very good one Baal............im jealous

    (about that....i suck at poems anyways)


    thank u SasuraiHell
    go -=NOOBZ=- clan!

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    Re: ''Cant go on without u''

    I was attract by the title
    it is very gd and touching!

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    Re: ''Cant go on without u''

    The use of you begans to get repititive and isnt necessary. In fact, it took away from the poem for me.
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    Re: ''Cant go on without u''

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai View Post
    The use of you begans to get repititive and isnt necessary. In fact, it took away from the poem for me.
    ofcourse i did



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: ''Cant go on without u''

    I like it!!! Keep it up!!!
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