Theres a lot going on here... Almost to the point of this seeming less poetic and more... short storyish (try saying that 5x fast).
Perhaps putting in breaks to present more of a rythm would help.
I thought we'd be together
thinking it would last forever
It seemed like only yesterday
we made that promise to be married someday
Reminiscing those days
when nothing kept us apart
After embracing you into my arms
and looking deep into your eyes
I knew you were the one
To spend the rest of my life with you
until Death takes my soul
But on that day
life took its toll
when you moved away
Our ties now severed
yet my feeling still unchanged
Years have gone by
but my hope remains
Awaiting that day
when we would meet again
I searched high and low
for any leads to your location
despite the long duration
I still wanted to see you
No matter what
my highest priority was to find you
When I finally found you
I wish I didn't
To me, our promise was everything
To you, now it means nothing
for you have found another
to spend rest of your life with
You told me your wedding was in July
After hearing those dreadful words
I just wanted to die
The feelings of love
soon became feelings of resentment
So here ends my story
The life I had once dreamt of
now just blunt memories
Facing the mirror
I put the heater to my brain
pull the trigger
and wait for my consciousness to wane
*Sorry if my poem seems inappropriate or disturbing in any way
Theres a lot going on here... Almost to the point of this seeming less poetic and more... short storyish (try saying that 5x fast).
Perhaps putting in breaks to present more of a rythm would help.
... Not Ever Again...
Kuinta (Aug 21, 2008)
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