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    Can't (Poem)

    I wrote this poem late last night. I don't even really now where I got the inspiration for it. lol Tell me what you think.

    Can’t hold on to water
    Falling from my fingertips
    Flowing into a river
    Winding far away

    Can’t hear the wind
    Over the ringing in my ears
    Blowing through the forest
    Leaves dancing in the breeze

    Can’t smell the flowers
    Because of garbage in the dumps
    Still growing in the green fields
    Trying to catch the sun

    Can’t taste the sweetness of fruit
    Since there’s too much junk
    It’s there hanging on vines and trees
    Waiting to be picked

    Can’t see the light
    It isn’t in my dark eyes
    Hidden in the shadows
    Where’s the switch to turn it on?

    Can’t find myself
    Swallowed up in the world
    Too many puzzle pieces missing
    Scattered all around this earth

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    Re: Can't (Poem)

    wow, yes i liked this one too. Full of emotion and uncertainty of yourself. Nice work. Your emotions are clearly stated in your poetry.
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    Re: Can't (Poem)

    WOW that was good I really like it.
    It has so much feeling and emotion .
    Keep it up hope to read more of your poems^.^

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    Re: Can't (Poem)

    i liked this poem you really desribed how the wrold is decaying really well
    and alot of thing you said are true about the fruits and the water and the sun shine, its a rel shame that life isnt like it used to be before we started poluttin git with all this junk we created. very cool poem are you ibto preserving the world
    or something? it sounds like it.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Can't (Poem)

    Thanks for the comments you guys! I'm glad you guys liked it!

    Holder: lol I guess I'm sort of in to the whole perserve the world thing.

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