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    Can't take much more!!

    Despite what you'll all probably assume, this is NOT about my fiance. It's about a very good friend of mine and an annoyance.

    I cannot take the pain that you put inside of me
    When I think of things and it hurts
    It’s all fighting me
    Those people who hang on your every word
    Will they ever go away?
    This girl she likes to tag along
    Pretend she’s your best friend
    She won’t shut up
    She waits around
    Tries to get to you before I can
    I’ll kick her ass
    Knock her eyes right out of her head
    It’s pissing me off
    I’m losing my mind
    From this anger you’ve settled in me
    I can’t take anymore
    I’m about to go off
    On anyone that gets in my way
    All this sh!t I’ve been through
    It’s all raining down
    Reminding me of everything
    That could happen to any of us
    Now that girl
    She’s still there
    What the hell does she want?
    Don’t she get it?
    You’ve blocked her from everything
    Every memory
    Every route
    She is out of your life
    But each day I see
    She comes crawling back
    Sucking up
    Being friendly
    Like she hasn’t annoyed the sh!t out of you
    Doesn’t she know her place?
    Won’t she just go away?
    I can’t take much more of this stupid sh!t!!!

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    Re: Can't take much more!!

    wow i love this and your right poeple like that need to know when to quit agrevating other's thei poem shows how frustrating it can bem very well done
    i loved it
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Can't take much more!!

    I wasnt a big fan of the wording and I really dislike one long stanza. Shorter stanzas are always more appealing to the eye.
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    Re: Can't take much more!!

    whoo, its sounds like someones is like losing their mind and cant take it really nice keep it up, i like it

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