Thread: Cautiously

wow. deep in depth stanzas and detail. The best poem i read here. Great use of words

Originally Posted by gren

Cautiously



Cautiously, I adore you.
No words of devotion will I speak,
you'll never see the blooming of this heart.

This has to be my favorite stanza. I love the way you worded it. I have done this very thing, more times than I care to count. You put alot of thought and meaning into your words, I just hope that I can be as good of a writer as you are someday. Guess I'll just watch what you write and learn from you. Can't really say anything bad about this poem. I liked all of it, but that stanza....you definantly have a way with words.

Ahhh... this was truly wonderful!!! Perfect I must say or is it the music working on my brain again? ^^

This poem is perfect- short, easy to understand, but having its mistery, the words are perfect, beautiful, the rhythm is also nice, flowing, the repetition is perfectly made to create that flow, the mood- loving, dreamy and yet sad... And the thought (the plot)- so true to life.

One more thing- this:

I sought out your shelter,
but am content to rest my head on your door.

Was the line witch confused me the most (hehe... not used to such language ), but it's also the line which created an image in my head, and images appear only when I'm truly touched

Anyways- nice work (sorry if it seemd my praises are overexaggerated) and I hope to see more

Oh wow... @.@ deep and nicely written... this is a great piece... i loved it... ^^

The use of words here are very good...carefully selected eh?

Slowly, I accept you.
The sound of your life is sweet music,
but I set the volume far too low to hear

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nice use of methaphores... ^^

Imagery was nicely used...

and the poem was truly a suprise with the title...admiration of someone silently.. my.. deep and yet easily to be understand with the main topic you want to convey... nicely done.. a kudos to you there

This is really good......I love the unique way you wrote the words and used them to create a certain type of rhythm......and the words are magnificent by themselves
Great job!!!!!!!

WOAH!! thats soooo awesome great words of description.thats deep and very good.

I see this might be coming from the heart??LOL great work^-^

love to hear more

♥~*The Princess*~♥

You can tell you read many poems in your days & knowing someone of your caliber still do...

The message that was conveyed to me is someone who wants to love, but is scared & by that pushing love away...

1st stanza
Speaks of the color of love, but is afraid of being lost in it's dark hues

2nd stanza
Speaks of the sounds of love, but one deafens themselves to guard them from the lovely tones that can cause pain

3rd stanza
Speaks for itself, but is the touch of love & how ones' mechanics of love draws back when it comes to physical attraction/contact

4th stanza
Speaks of the word of love & how one won't speak on admiration &/or the hidden love that's kept secret

5th stanza
Speaks of the comfort of love & how one seeked it, but never wanted to get too close & by that letting love get away

Well that is what I got from this poem... I might have looked in too deep or not deep enough, but I tried to break it down the best way I could & what I comprehended from this written work...

I applaud you for this poem & keep reading poetry cause it shows in your work...