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    Chained

    Stuck in one place
    Not able to move
    Pain is constant
    My will is fading

    Slashes rip through my flesh
    Crimson fluid oozes down my back
    I cry out in pain and agony
    My captors laughter rings in my ears

    The sharp flick of metal against flesh
    Another wound has been garnered
    I clench my jaw and close my eyes
    Against the scream fighting to escape

    The hours pass by in unrelenting pain
    My inflicted torture never ends
    Over and over my vision is blurred
    Blood, sweat and tears begin pooling together

    My wrists and ankles are unchained
    My broken beaten body slumps to the floor
    Taking in the comfort of the cool stone
    Ragged breaths my lungs are taking

    My comfort doesn't last that long
    My captors roughly drag my upright
    Shoving me in the direction of the door
    I stumble and fall trying to block the pain

    They grab me under my arms
    Seeing that I have no strength
    Drag me down the hall to a door
    One that I had hoped never to enter

    I try to struggle and free myself
    But my attempts are feeble and fail
    They shove me through and lock the door
    To my horror I see, what occurs in nightmares.
    Why is everything so ****ing hard for me? Keep me down to what you think I should be! Must you tempt me and provoke the ministry? Keep on trying I'm not dying so easily!

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    Re: Chained

    OMG!!!!!!!!!
    Wow......deliciously dark.........
    I love it!!!!!!
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    Re: Chained

    thank you i like to write about the darker side of the human soul. lol i had some problems with this one cuz i wanted to add more but it looked finished at the same time.
    Why is everything so ****ing hard for me? Keep me down to what you think I should be! Must you tempt me and provoke the ministry? Keep on trying I'm not dying so easily!

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    Re: Chained

    but it sounds really really good to me...........so no worries!!!!!!!
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    Re: Chained

    my.... love the description...the way you play with words... nice... dark indeed.. nice imagination you have and you projected it well...well done... ^^

    Keep it up.. will be reading more of yours... i hope you will write more...

    I agree with Astaroth... ^^

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    Re: Chained

    Refreashing....
    I was expecting to read about metaphoric chains.... the chains of life... the chains of love....

    But, I think Im far more impressed with this being about real chains, real capture, real pain.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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