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Old Jul 31, 2007, 09:23 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Changing Life (Part Four)

Stop!!! As you should see, this is part four. If you haven't read the other three parts are follow this link: Changing Life (Part One)

Changing Life (Part Four)
Here you sit
In great despair
But what about your girlfriend
Do you not even care

While this was going on
She was sleeping with another man
You thought she couldn't do this
But oh yes, she can

But you don't know
You don't have a clue
And it feels like the world is crashing
Falling right before you

To add on
You later caught a cold
But that will not stop you
To make everything unfold

You go to see if she is okay
The one that's in bed
The doctor said she'll manage
But told you to rest your head

You ignore her advice
And call your girlfriend instead
But on the other side
No words are to be said

The cold is worse than it is
And you start home to your front door
But as soon as you enter
You collapse on the floor

Next thing you know
You're in your bed in surprise
And the one to comfort you
Is your girlfriend at your side

But the nicest thing she'll do
Is take care of you at your place
And once you're finally better
You'll talk face to face

She reveals the truth
She admits the affair
And all you can do
Is just sit and stare

Next thing you know
She's out the door
It seems right now
She's your girlfriend no more

Life is at halt
Your body goes numb
You want to move
But you can't even move a thumb

A phone message brings you to your senses
It's from the other's family
The girl is awake
And you're the only one she wants to see

Another decision is to be made
And it's all up to you
The dreadful question to yourself is
What are you going to do.

Writer's Notes: Nope, not the final part. Part five I'm sure is. I don't care how much information is going to be jammed in there, it's going to end at the next part. Anyways, again, I left out stuff I would like to be in there and changed some stuff because I didn't want it too be too long. Tell me what you think and thank you for reading. (Final part is finished: Changing Life (Final Part Five))
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Old Jul 31, 2007, 09:35 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Changing Life (Part Four)

Wow!!! This is great!!! I really love this part- if I could find something I didn't like that much in the rest, then this one is just perfect!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I don' t even know what to say...

A great work!!!!!! I'll be waiting for that fifth part... you really cought my interest with this one!!!!!!!! I really want to know how this ends.
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Thanks. Glad you liked it. I'll try my best to make the final part the best.
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