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    Changing Life (Part Four)

    Stop!!! As you should see, this is part four. If you haven't read the other three parts are follow this link: Changing Life (Part One)

    Changing Life (Part Four)
    Here you sit
    In great despair
    But what about your girlfriend
    Do you not even care

    While this was going on
    She was sleeping with another man
    You thought she couldn't do this
    But oh yes, she can

    But you don't know
    You don't have a clue
    And it feels like the world is crashing
    Falling right before you

    To add on
    You later caught a cold
    But that will not stop you
    To make everything unfold

    You go to see if she is okay
    The one that's in bed
    The doctor said she'll manage
    But told you to rest your head

    You ignore her advice
    And call your girlfriend instead
    But on the other side
    No words are to be said

    The cold is worse than it is
    And you start home to your front door
    But as soon as you enter
    You collapse on the floor

    Next thing you know
    You're in your bed in surprise
    And the one to comfort you
    Is your girlfriend at your side

    But the nicest thing she'll do
    Is take care of you at your place
    And once you're finally better
    You'll talk face to face

    She reveals the truth
    She admits the affair
    And all you can do
    Is just sit and stare

    Next thing you know
    She's out the door
    It seems right now
    She's your girlfriend no more

    Life is at halt
    Your body goes numb
    You want to move
    But you can't even move a thumb

    A phone message brings you to your senses
    It's from the other's family
    The girl is awake
    And you're the only one she wants to see

    Another decision is to be made
    And it's all up to you
    The dreadful question to yourself is
    What are you going to do.

    Writer's Notes: Nope, not the final part. Part five I'm sure is. I don't care how much information is going to be jammed in there, it's going to end at the next part. Anyways, again, I left out stuff I would like to be in there and changed some stuff because I didn't want it too be too long. Tell me what you think and thank you for reading. (Final part is finished: Changing Life (Final Part Five))
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    Re: Changing Life (Part Four)

    Wow!!! This is great!!! I really love this part- if I could find something I didn't like that much in the rest, then this one is just perfect!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I don' t even know what to say...

    A great work!!!!!! I'll be waiting for that fifth part... you really cought my interest with this one!!!!!!!! I really want to know how this ends.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Changing Life (Part Four)

    Thanks. Glad you liked it. I'll try my best to make the final part the best.

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