Thread: Changing Life (Part Three)

umm i really like it. its just that i dont get it. but i loved how you worded it!! if you have the time could you explain it to me cause i would love to understand your poem you could explain it on here or you could pm me either way!! but i love it anyways!!=)

Yeah, this part is sort of confusing. If you haven't read the others, it might not make as much more sense even if I describe it.

In part three, it starts out right after they get news that his high school girlfriend has awaken from a coma that happened three years ago. He goes to visit her but he cannot tell anything that will say that she has been in a coma for three years. If told, she will be in shock and she might go back into her coma.

He then makes a vow to visit her everyday because that's the least he can do. Yet, his feelings for her a starting to arise again during each visit. His current girlfriend sees this because he spends more time with the other rather than herself. She makes him commit to an ultimatum to never see her again.

He agrees but it doesn't turn out for the better. He doesn't speak to either of the girls and it seems like his life around him isn't any better. Time has pasted and one day he sees her sister (one that was in a coma's sister) look at him in a certain way. (They've met before but I forgot to put it in the previous parts)

He is worried and goes back even though he agreed to his girlfriend that he wouldn't and all that he's gone through. While he goes back, his girlfriend is out. Still having mixed thoughts about their relationship. She makes a bad choice (I'll speak of it more in the fourth part).

Yet while at the hospital, I foreshadow that something is going to happen. Another stanza restating that you can't say certain things. But the girl at the hospital asks these questions like what's the date, how long has it been since the accident, and what's going on.

She wants answers, and she gets them. Her sister is also in the room, tired with all the lies, she tells all that it is. What happened, how long, and what's going on right now. She doesn't like to say this so that's why she's crying. After all is said, the words strike her so shockingly that she goes back into the coma because her weak mind state can't handle it.

That's the best I can describe it. I missed a quite a few details but I had to bend the real story so that's the best I could do. If you still have questions, please ask and I'll try to answer them the best I can. (I also edited the poem a bit.)