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    Cherub Tome Part 1

    Panel1: a young man with medium length brown hair and a skinny stature is sleeping on his back against an old apple tree that is planted on a floating chunk of earth with other chunks of earth around it.
    Panel2: A young boy with long black hair that hides his face (a distinct resemblance to the girl in the ring) and wearing a night gown materializes in front of the young man.
    Panel3: The young man wakes up
    Panel4: The young man rises and stretches
    Panel5: We do a close up on the young boys face (or where the face would be)
    Young boy: why are you here?
    Panel6: We do a close up on the young man from the shoulders up with a puzzled look
    Young man: what...
    Panel7: The young boy starts to dematerializes
    Panel8: We do a scene showing the young man lunging forward trying to grab the young boy
    Panel9: We do a scene from the side of the young mans face in shock. ( a tearing sound in background)
    Panel10: we do a scene where the young man is turning to see what the tearing sound came from
    Panel11: we do a full body shot of the young man with his left arm torn off from the shoulder down with blood gushing out like a fountain.
    Panel12: The young man is about to scream
    Panel13: all black with the word “thud” across the panel
    Panel14: a light turns on and we see the young man grasping his left arm with a low lantern swinging above his bed where he lays
    Panel15: we do a close up scene of the right of the young mans head with his eyes closed
    Young man: **** dreams
    Panel16: we are outside in front of a steel one manned house
    Panel17: the door to the steel house opens
    Panel18: an army boot appears from the dark insides of the house
    Panel19: we do a close up of a brown leather glove being pulled onto a hand
    Panel20: a full body scene of the young man wearing a grayish blue trench coat, long brown leather gloves, commando boots, and a peak officers cap.
    Panel21: we do a ¾ head shot of the young man who turns his head to see who is calling him.
    ??? : Good morning Velhelm
    Panel22 we see a kid on roller skates coming toward Velhelm waving
    Panel23: we go back to is waving back
    Velhelm: good morning to you, Syi
    Panel24: Syi stops right in front of Velhelm
    Panel25: Syi looks up at Velhelm
    Syi: You got Mail!
    Panel26: we see an envelope in Syi’s hand
    Panel27: Velhelm takes the envelope
    Panel28: Velhelm drops the letter into his right coat pocket
    Panel29: Velhelm looks toward Syi who is starting to leave
    Velhelm: Thanks a lot!
    Panel30: Syi is leaving Velhelm waving good-bye

    So what do you think

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    Re: Cherub Tome Part 1

    dude is this suppose to resemble a storyboard? If it is, it's okay but usually storyboards work visually. Overall it's okay.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Cherub Tome Part 1

    Quote Originally Posted by Blade X
    dude is this suppose to resemble a storyboard? If it is, it's okay but usually storyboards work visually. Overall it's okay.
    Well Im not that good with anime so I decided to do a comic script

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    Re: Cherub Tome Part 1

    Man I hate script format............................................ ...*bombs this thread to hell* hahahahahahah.....ha...ha........EGG! *turns into an easter egg*


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    Re: Cherub Tome Part 1

    Quote Originally Posted by Meji Imaru
    Man I hate script format............................................ ...*bombs this thread to hell* hahahahahahah.....ha...ha........EGG! *turns into an easter egg*
    wtf? Man I am lost about the egg thing

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