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    child abus!!!

    My name is Sarah

    I am three,

    My eyes are swollen

    I cannot see,

    I must be stupid

    I must be bad,

    What else could have made

    My daddy so mad?

    I wish I were better

    I wish I weren't ugly,

    Then maybe my mommy

    Would still want to hug me.

    I can't do a wrong

    I can't speak at all

    Or else I'm locked up

    All day long.

    When I'm awake I'm all alone

    The house is dark

    My folks aren't home

    When my mommy does come home

    I'll try and be nice,

    So maybe I'll just get

    One whipping tonight.

    I just heard a car

    My daddy is back

    From Charlie's bar.

    I hear him curse

    My name is called

    I press myself

    Against the wall

    I try to hide

    From his evil eyes

    I'm so afraid now

    I'm starting to cry

    He finds me weeping

    Calls me ugly words,

    He says its my fault

    He suffers at work.

    He slaps and hits me

    And yells at me more,

    I finally get free

    And run to the door

    He's already locked it

    And I start to bawl,

    He takes me and throws me

    Against the hard wall

    I fall to the floor

    With my bones nearly broken,

    And my daddy continues

    With more bad words spoken,

    "Im sorry!", I scream

    But its now much too late

    His face has been twisted

    Into an unimaginable shape

    The hurt and the pain

    Again and again

    Oh please God, have mercy!

    Oh please let it end!

    And he finally stops

    And heads for the door

    While I lay there motionless

    Brawled on the floor

    My name is Sarah

    I am three,

    Tonight my daddy

    Murdered me

    And you can help

    Sickens me to the soul,

    And if you read this

    And don't pass it on

    I pray for your forgiveness

    Cause you would have to be

    One heartless person

    To not be effected

    By this Poem

    And because you are effected,

    Do something about it

    So all I ask you to do

    Is pass this on

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    Re: child abus!!!

    um.....
    well is this your work? um...well it's very touching and ...um....seriously this sounds kinda disturbing >.< but still ok i guess

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    Re: child abus!!!

    i did it last night i read in the news about child abus so heres how it truned out

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    Re: child abus!!!

    Oh my GOD O_O TT ___ TT poor kid Where are the parents

    ..........

    <.<


    >.>

    This is not real is it

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    Re: child abus!!!

    what a tragic in to an incient
    life. this poem sort of got me
    thinking of something i saw last week
    in the mall i sort of over looked because
    i didnt realise what was going on till
    i just read this poem. i wonder if the kids ok now?
    anyway very good poem it should open alot of eyes on AO
    maybe
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: child abus!!!

    Its too long, maybe try and make it shorter and more profound. I personally would have written it about someone over the age of 3, as at the age of 3, you don't really know you are a waste of space? but it has good rhythm. :!) also is it on purpose that you are mis-spelling "abuse"?

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    Re: child abus!!!

    Aside from minor alterations like changing "I am but three" to "I am three", omitting certain parts of the poem, rearranging lines, and the last part which seems to be taken from a chain letter, this is not your work so don't try to take all the credit unless your name is Gayle Jones Staples who is the original poet which I highly doubt since you're only 13 and this poem was written in 1975. You have just been busted. You're going to Hell for plagiarism. I will be waiting for you....

    PROOF: http://www.kidscookiemix.com/sarahpoem.htm
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    Re: child abus!!!

    despite leaving a aspace between every line......yes this is a tragic story of no love and all hate........very disturbing yet true in wut humans are capable of..

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