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    The child of peace...

    The child of peace.
    A child only knows peace and happiness,
    A child only wants to have fun and love,

    A girl only wants to grow up,
    A girl only wants to have friends,

    A woman only wants to fall in love,
    A woman only wants a blessed child,

    A child only wants their mother of peace.

    this is my frist poem so any comment will be great.
    Last edited by nightboyz; Oct 31, 2006 at 09:47 AM.
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    Re: The child of peace...

    The repetition is cute. More elaboration and imagery. ^-^
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    Re: The child of peace...

    Thanks For you two cents ill work on it. Ill see what I can do.
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