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    Choka #1 Peace

    If people stayed true
    To their religious tenants
    The outcome is peace
    But very few seldom do

    When will struggle cease
    Smell violence in the wind
    Wind under a sky soft-blue

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    Re: Choka #1 Peace

    kudos for the whole japanese poetry format thing you got goin' on.
    I think you could have made it longer.
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    Re: Choka #1 Peace

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    kudos for the whole japanese poetry format thing you got goin' on.
    I think you could have made it longer.
    Thank you. I am always happy when people say they want more. The interesting thing about the choka is that there is only a limit on how short it can be but it can go on for however long you want. As long as it ends in 5-7-7.

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    Re: Choka #1 Peace

    Very nicely done i'm not too good with those types of poetry but i suck at writing anytype of poetry. You have an amazing talent keep it up.

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