Cinderella

*equinn* · Jun 02, 2007, 02:52 PM

Cinderella you have a prince and a kingdom

is this all you ever wanted??

you lived in a dusty celler..

cleaned for your step mum and sisters

teated like a slave

did you ever think you would end up the queen of the kindom?

as it all a fairytale of is this all real

dream or real

you got the dream you were dreaming s this enough or is there more to this story of yours ..

KuwiRules145 · Jun 02, 2007, 02:57 PM

Awww.....This poem reminds me of Cinderella even though it is called Cinderella but I love that movie so I hope to see more!!!

fallenangel25 · Jun 02, 2007, 03:07 PM

thats a good question.hmm.lol.good poem,theres a few spelling errors but other than that its great!

xxoxx · Jun 03, 2007, 06:16 AM

yahh iam with you fall in point ...but the title and poem very nice ...
before i read the poem i see the title so i think it 's a bout Cinderella so i thought that but i like it ....hope to see more ...keep up...

LouisaDeztini · Jun 03, 2007, 06:49 AM

Quote:

teated like a slave

It should be 'treated'. ^^ Decided that I would start pointing out spelling mistakes for others after elie helpfully pointed out mine.

Quote:

as it all a fairytale of is this all real

I don't quite understand this line. I interpreted it as 'Is it all a fairytale or is this all real?', or/and 'As it is all a fairytale or is this all real?'. So depending on how others look at it, well, from the way I look at it, it has two contradictory points. So hopefully you could correct your spelling mistake? Cause it kind of confused me at the start.

Besides that, I like your poem. Short, sweet. And sounds quite like what a young child would ask Cinderella

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equinn Ao's official cat girl~★ Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Emerald island (Eire) (Ireland) Posts: 1,601 Thanks: 10 Thanked 19 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 16,054	Cinderella Cinderella you have a prince and a kingdom is this all you ever wanted?? you lived in a dusty celler.. cleaned for your step mum and sisters teated like a slave did you ever think you would end up the queen of the kindom? as it all a fairytale of is this all real dream or real you got the dream you were dreaming s this enough or is there more to this story of yours .. __________________
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KuwiRules145 Tournaments Won: 2 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 963 Thanks: 3 Thanked 24 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,226	Re: Cinderella Awww.....This poem reminds me of Cinderella even though it is called Cinderella but I love that movie so I hope to see more!!! __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡
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fallenangel25 Newbie Join Date: May 2007 Location: Inbetween Heaven & Hell Posts: 85 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 310	Re: Cinderella thats a good question.hmm.lol.good poem,theres a few spelling errors but other than that its great! __________________ [/url]
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xxoxx Otaku Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: 無くなった Posts: 354 Thanks: 3 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 3,583	Re: Cinderella yahh iam with you fall in point ...but the title and poem very nice ... before i read the poem i see the title so i think it 's a bout Cinderella so i thought that but i like it ....hope to see more ...keep up... __________________ Just Try It
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