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    Cinderella

    Cinderella you have a prince and a kingdom

    is this all you ever wanted??

    you lived in a dusty celler..

    cleaned for your step mum and sisters

    teated like a slave

    did you ever think you would end up the queen of the kindom?

    as it all a fairytale of is this all real

    dream or real

    you got the dream you were dreaming s this enough or is there more to this story of yours ..

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    Re: Cinderella

    Awww.....This poem reminds me of Cinderella even though it is called Cinderella but I love that movie so I hope to see more!!!
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    Re: Cinderella

    thats a good question.hmm.lol.good poem,theres a few spelling errors but other than that its great!
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    Re: Cinderella

    yahh iam with you fall in point ...but the title and poem very nice ...
    before i read the poem i see the title so i think it 's a bout Cinderella so i thought that but i like it ....hope to see more ...keep up...

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    Re: Cinderella

    teated like a slave
    It should be 'treated'. ^^ Decided that I would start pointing out spelling mistakes for others after elie helpfully pointed out mine.

    as it all a fairytale of is this all real
    I don't quite understand this line. I interpreted it as 'Is it all a fairytale or is this all real?', or/and 'As it is all a fairytale or is this all real?'. So depending on how others look at it, well, from the way I look at it, it has two contradictory points. So hopefully you could correct your spelling mistake? Cause it kind of confused me at the start.

    Besides that, I like your poem. Short, sweet. And sounds quite like what a young child would ask Cinderella

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