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    On this cloud (my 2 sons)

    My 2 sons, You're always there.
    When my spirits need a lift.
    Run your tiny fingers through my hair.
    On dream clouds as we drift.

    This painful world makes me weap.
    You both lend me your ears.
    And though my secrets you must keep.
    You kiss away my fears.

    On this cloud, were safe and sound.
    Free from the world below you.
    I wish you'd never have to come down
    to face the pain this life will show you.

    Im sorry you have to see my cry.
    But thank you for wanting to console me.
    I love the fact that you both try
    to help me feel less lonely.

    So on this cloud we sail away.
    And we all hold eachother.
    My promise to you, my 2 sons.
    Is to be a better mother.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: On this cloud (my 2 sons)

    Awwwww.... how sweet. I love it a lot since it deals with the spending time with mother and son in this. I hope to read more of your wonderful poems!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: On this cloud (my 2 sons)

    Quote Originally Posted by KuwiRules145 View Post
    Awwwww.... how sweet. I love it a lot since it deals with the spending time with mother and son in this. I hope to read more of your wonderful poems!
    Thank you, I was trying to write something a bit happier. Trying to appreciate the good things in my life.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: On this cloud (my 2 sons)

    I think this was a very sweet poem, shows your motherly side I wonder whether that's what I'ma feel next time O.o It shows that although your life hasn't been easy, to know your 2 kids there, it means a lot to you I guess. Touching poem. Tho I found a minor flaw..

    This painful world makes me weap.
    Typo XD "weep" should be the right word.
    Nice job Peach

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    Re: On this cloud (my 2 sons)

    man i love this peom a mothers affection
    can never be out done when it come to love
    and devotion and your words are so simple yet
    they hold so much meaning .

    your sons are really lucky you love them so
    much and this poem is a excellent dedication to them
    you really have put into words that most would only
    find actions for . very awesome poem once again
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: On this cloud (my 2 sons)

    nice poem but i feel some sad feeling there..
    and you with your son that was very sweet ....keep up ...
    i love it ..

    Foolish beating

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