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  1. Apr 25, 2006 12:27 AM #1
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    Clouds

    my elder bro's fren moved on....car accident so tis poem is me portraying wat i would feel if i was in his shoes...o.O and rest in peace dude.

    Clouds

    I feel so light, as light as one can be
    I take my last look at the ground
    Recalling my time on earth

    The incident is playing on my mind
    Forward, backwards, pause, STOP
    Breathing slowly…
    Heart beating begins slowing...

    To the man that hit me
    I hold no grudge or hatred against you
    Just pity for your fate
    Yours is the worst
    To live with this guilt
    For the rest of your life

    Beloved family and friends
    I hope you will be able to move on
    Time will wash away your pain and sorrow
    Who knows, maybe one day we will meet again


    I will miss you all
    Thought it’s not easy to tell you goodbye
    My time has come
    I will continue believing and hoping
    Just know that I’ll always be looking from the clouds above…
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  2. Apr 25, 2006 12:29 AM #2
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    Re: Clouds

    You're a GOD Elie!
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    Re: Clouds

    With what we chated, it helps to give further a message, a nice commemorative poem in rememberance of this tragic event for this person. I'm happy to see that you still write as I do think you can really show what you feel or see what others feel.
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  4. Apr 25, 2006 12:31 AM #4
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    Re: Clouds

    I love it although it is sad I do believe you went with all your soul in this poem

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    Re: Clouds

    i just don't know what to say, but ur poems are always a pleasure to read. and i hope ur bro isn't to torn up about it either. anyway great poem elie, it truely is a master peice.
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    Re: Clouds

    mmmmm... nice work here you got elie. I'm with Zackraa. *Slap* Rave.......
    I have no words to say to that. It's very sad thou...
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  7. Apr 25, 2006 08:03 AM #7
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    Re: Clouds

    this is good, u poured emotions into it n made it awesome.

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    Re: Clouds

    nice poem elie16, keep it up.
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