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    Thumbs down The cold stops it all.

    No more pillow to lay my head.
    No ore arms to hold me near.
    No more Inn to take me.
    There is nothing no more.

    My heart is weary.
    And my feet so sore.
    But the confusion is the worst.
    How I got here, I don't quite know.

    But when it started to snow.
    I had to pull my cloak tight.
    Because the cold of the night,
    Started to feel too good.

    I don't remember the fire I sit before.
    They told me I screamed,
    And called myself no more.
    Told them them it's what I wanted.

    The numbness followed by,
    Jubilation, for the release,
    Of so called cares.
    That no one could ever understand.

    No more obligation on my shoulders.
    No more blisters on my feet.
    No more migranes from frustration.
    No more tears from aching hearts.

    No more wishing hoping and dreaming,
    No more disapointment over failure.
    No more waiting, watching.
    The cold. Stops it all;
    It is the end of me.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: The cold stops it all.

    ooh...nice imagery i like it... but so many "no more" repeated..

    Hmm weird...why not many commenting this poem?

    Keep up the good work ok dont let this pull you down ^^

    i would be reading more of yours..

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    Re: The cold stops it all.

    that poem is awsomei really love the wording u used and i love the lines

    No more wishing hoping and dreaming,
    No more disapointment over failure.
    No more waiting, watching.
    The cold. Stops it all;
    It is the end of me.


    they were my fave ^^ great job 10/10

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    Re: The cold stops it all.

    Thanks a lot. It's really differnt then a lot of my work and so I'm glad you enjoy it because I was unsure of it.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Cool Re: The cold stops it all.

    ...Hmmm...

    This poem was very ...ummm... I don't know how to describe it X.X

    Ok, I think I know.

    It had a very good use of adjectives I must say *nods*

    It's also very different...Let's use... unique. Yeah, very entirely unique. I got a bit confused at one or two verse(s) but I think I knew what you were trying to say. Very VERY well done.

    The poem rocks and I hope you write more

    Oh, and This is my favourite verse...
    No more obligation on my shoulders.
    No more blisters on my feet.
    No more migranes from frustration.
    No more tears from aching hearts.
    Love that verse!!!

    -Zainab

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    Re: The cold stops it all.

    That is ...wow 0.0 thats just good I mean it Nice work keep it up i could fill it u should be a poeat ^^ keep up the good work and cant wait 2 see more^^
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    Re: The cold stops it all.

    Wow. I'm glad you guys liked it so much. Adjectives are my favorite I must admit. I'm suprised no one has noticed that about me before.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: The cold stops it all.

    wow mate you have got something going on that a fantastic poem i can fell the imaginasion is this the first poem you have writen because it rules so write some work and keep the good work up 9/10 : )

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