The cold stops it all.

**bratling** · Oct 18, 2007 12:23 AM

No more pillow to lay my head.
No ore arms to hold me near.
No more Inn to take me.
There is nothing no more.

My heart is weary.
And my feet so sore.
But the confusion is the worst.
How I got here, I don't quite know.

But when it started to snow.
I had to pull my cloak tight.
Because the cold of the night,
Started to feel too good.

I don't remember the fire I sit before.
They told me I screamed,
And called myself no more.
Told them them it's what I wanted.

The numbness followed by,
Jubilation, for the release,
Of so called cares.
That no one could ever understand.

No more obligation on my shoulders.
No more blisters on my feet.
No more migranes from frustration.
No more tears from aching hearts.

No more wishing hoping and dreaming,
No more disapointment over failure.
No more waiting, watching.
The cold. Stops it all;
It is the end of me.

**RayMe** · Oct 19, 2007 03:43 AM

ooh...nice imagery

i like it... but so many "no more" repeated..

Hmm weird...why not many commenting this poem?

Keep up the good work ok dont let this pull you down ^^

i would be reading more of yours..

**equinn** · Oct 19, 2007 05:57 AM

that poem is awsomei really love the wording u used and i love the lines

No more wishing hoping and dreaming,
No more disapointment over failure.
No more waiting, watching.
The cold. Stops it all;
It is the end of me.

they were my fave ^^ great job 10/10

**bratling** · Oct 19, 2007 06:29 AM

Thanks a lot. It's really differnt then a lot of my work and so I'm glad you enjoy it because I was unsure of it.

**ihauntforlust** · Oct 19, 2007 09:42 AM

...Hmmm...

This poem was very ...ummm... I don't know how to describe it X.X

Ok, I think I know.

It had a very good use of adjectives I must say *nods*

It's also very different...Let's use... unique. Yeah, very entirely unique. I got a bit confused at one or two verse(s) but I think I knew what you were trying to say. Very VERY well done.

The poem rocks and I hope you write more

Oh, and This is my favourite verse...

No more obligation on my shoulders.
No more blisters on my feet.
No more migranes from frustration.
No more tears from aching hearts.

Love that verse!!!

-Zainab

**SasukePorter** · Oct 19, 2007 09:58 AM

That is ...wow 0.0 thats just good I mean it Nice work keep it up i could fill it u should be a poeat ^^ keep up the good work and cant wait 2 see more^^

**bratling** · Oct 19, 2007 01:05 PM

Wow. I'm glad you guys liked it so much. Adjectives are my favorite I must admit. I'm suprised no one has noticed that about me before.

**Tom2Ace** · Oct 19, 2007 02:50 PM

wow mate you have got something going on that a fantastic poem i can fell the imaginasion is this the first poem you have writen because it rules so write some work and keep the good work up 9/10 : )

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