Collaboration/story anyone can add!!

Ok I started this and now do not know what to do with it, so I am posting it as a collaboration that any one can add to:D:
BTW I am giving Beast the official head on this, meaning he can give advice, suggestions and pretty much what ever he thinks needs doing:2thumbs:
But anyone is invited to give constructive criticism.


Under a sky so blue and pail
a young man starts to tell a tail.
A story of victory's,
and quests almost failed,
of long days traveling,
in rain and hail,
of nights under star and sail,
and beasts so fantastic,
they could make a lion seem frail.

the story also of , a friend
who took the path of betrayal
and left him alone
To the mercy of waves and gale
upon a small craft
all broken and frail
So hear starts the tail
of a young warrior
who's faith has yet to bail

He must complete this will of brass
unknown to him where this will lead
he will be challenged, he will bleed
but not one is he that gives up at will
and if he has to he will kill
for their is more at stake than has been reviled

Ok have at it guys!:p1: The only thing I ask is to have some rhyme and try to make it all flow together, Oh and one more thing......Use you imagination!!
Thanks to: starfire1036 and Dragons2801 :)
Keep the ideas coming!

add some twists yo example

[Of, also, a friend
who walks down the path of betrayal
and alone left him
to set sail
upon a small craft
that's broken and frail.
Starting this tail
in a boat that he's set sail.

Thanks!! I really liked it :p1: I hope you do not mind but I took what you did and changed the wording a bit to make it flow with the first stanza. Thanks again it was a grate idea:2thumbs:

[within the vast watery mass
he must complete this will of brass
unknown to him where this will lead
he will be challenged, he will bleed
but not one is he that gives up at will
and if he has to he will kill

brass means nerve.
this one that i wrote sounds a little weird.