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Sep 12, 2007, 08:36 AM
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| Banned  | ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ I donno how it happened I donno why But all the time we spent together Flew right by It doesn’t seem to matter What you did to me All you seem to care about Is the new girl you see Is it right To feel this way Lost in the world Like yesterday The person that I love Gone in the blink of an eye Forever to become a memory Do I lay down and die No.. I will be strong I won’t give up For there is another I love just as much This love won’t vanish It will only grow For once I tell him I love him I won’t feel so low We love in secret We care in our hearts The day will come soon When we dance beneath the stars We will find a way To be together some day Hand in hand, Forever we’ll stand Side my side, Hand in hand This is a combination of several poems that i have started and never finished in the last few days.. so it doesn't really go together i guess.. but whatever... Just tell me what you think and Please be honest about it.. oh and if you read this. REPLY PLEASE!!!!! |
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Sep 12, 2007, 08:46 AM
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 Credits: 2,215 | Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ This didn't go together?... Coulda fooled me. I thought it went quite smoothly actually. It seemed like you were talking about the end of one love ... while you looked foward to the begining of a new love. It was beautiful. The wierd thing is... I was reading someone elses poem... And I read your comment... Then I thought to myself "I sure wish Jamie would write a poem", Then when I went back to the poems you had posted one!!!! Its like you read my mind. ... o.O |
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Sep 12, 2007, 08:51 AM
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| Banned | Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ Quote:
wow.. really? you think that it's good? ^-^ thanks. It means a lot to me that you do. I.. wow.. I kinda got the feeling that i should write one but.. i wow.. ^-^ that's cool.. I haven't written one in a while and i figured that i should... so.. i did. I'm glad that you liked it^-^(by the way this is my smilie... it's supposed to look this way) | |
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Sep 12, 2007, 10:57 AM
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Sep 12, 2007, 05:24 PM
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Credits: 4,723 | Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ Verry good Job Jamie. I like it alot and I agree with everyone else it flows and goses together more than you may think. good job and keep it up.
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Sep 13, 2007, 06:43 AM
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Credits: 59,118 | Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ I agree with peachy~! love the rhyme to it ^^ nicely done... good job jamie..  would love to read more of urs..  keep on writing and keep up the good work ^^and congrats~ ^^ good luck to u... *smiles* |
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Sep 13, 2007, 10:30 AM
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| Banned | Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ Quote:
Thank you guys and i appreciate the feedback. I will write more as i can. | |
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Sep 13, 2007, 10:36 AM
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Credits: 3,962 | Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~ I' is nicely put together if it really was from poems that were incomplete. i liked the feeling it gives a reader, well at least how it made me feel anyway. I hopes that made sense....O_o
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