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    ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    I donno how it happened
    I donno why
    But all the time we spent together
    Flew right by

    It doesn’t seem to matter
    What you did to me
    All you seem to care about
    Is the new girl you see

    Is it right
    To feel this way
    Lost in the world
    Like yesterday

    The person that I love
    Gone in the blink of an eye
    Forever to become a memory
    Do I lay down and die

    No.. I will be strong
    I won’t give up
    For there is another
    I love just as much

    This love won’t vanish
    It will only grow
    For once I tell him I love him
    I won’t feel so low

    We love in secret
    We care in our hearts
    The day will come soon
    When we dance beneath the stars

    We will find a way
    To be together some day
    Hand in hand, Forever we’ll stand
    Side my side, Hand in hand


    This is a combination of several poems that i have started and never finished in the last few days.. so it doesn't really go together i guess.. but whatever... Just tell me what you think and Please be honest about it.. oh and if you read this. REPLY PLEASE!!!!!

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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    This didn't go together?... Coulda fooled me. I thought it went quite smoothly actually.

    It seemed like you were talking about the end of one love ... while you looked foward to the begining of a new love.

    It was beautiful.

    The wierd thing is... I was reading someone elses poem... And I read your comment... Then I thought to myself "I sure wish Jamie would write a poem", Then when I went back to the poems you had posted one!!!! Its like you read my mind. ... o.O
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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    This didn't go together?... Coulda fooled me. I thought it went quite smoothly actually.

    It seemed like you were talking about the end of one love ... while you looked foward to the begining of a new love.

    It was beautiful.

    The wierd thing is... I was reading someone elses poem... And I read your comment... Then I thought to myself "I sure wish Jamie would write a poem", Then when I went back to the poems you had posted one!!!! Its like you read my mind. ... o.O


    wow.. really? you think that it's good? ^-^ thanks. It means a lot to me that you do.

    I.. wow.. I kinda got the feeling that i should write one but.. i wow.. ^-^ that's cool.. I haven't written one in a while and i figured that i should... so.. i did. I'm glad that you liked it^-^(by the way this is my smilie... it's supposed to look this way)

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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    I believe it fits very well to, and I love it as well.

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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    Verry good Job Jamie. I like it alot and I agree with everyone else it flows and goses together more than you may think. good job and keep it up.
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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    I agree with peachy~! love the rhyme to it ^^ nicely done... good job jamie.. would love to read more of urs.. keep on writing and keep up the good work ^^

    and congrats~ ^^ good luck to u... *smiles*

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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    I agree with peachy~! love the rhyme to it ^^ nicely done... good job jamie.. would love to read more of urs.. keep on writing and keep up the good work ^^

    and congrats~ ^^ good luck to u... *smiles*
    It was just a poem... You don't have to use real life experinces to write a good poem.

    Thank you guys and i appreciate the feedback. I will write more as i can.

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    Re: ~Combo of some Poems of mine~

    I' is nicely put together if it really was from poems that were incomplete. i liked the feeling it gives a reader, well at least how it made me feel anyway. I hopes that made sense....O_o

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