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    Come Rescue Me

    Come Rescue Me

    Will you be my savior
    My knight and shining Armor
    Take me away
    So we can be together forever

    Can I forget my past
    Starting anew
    And spend my life
    Being in love with you

    Will you take away the pain
    The heartache and misery
    Of the Past sorrow
    Of my innocence lost

    Can you be my guidance
    My angel of light
    The person who holds me close
    At night

    Will you look at me different
    The first time I hallucinate
    Or when you find out
    That I can’t believe what you say

    Can you realize that it’s my past
    Who has made me this way
    Where I question everything
    Of each and every day

    Will you come and rescue me
    From a family who doesn’t care
    And my suicidal thoughts
    My haunting nightmares
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Wow....

    It's awesome brokenlover....So cute and sort of depressing....it's like they are your wishes waiting to come true.....so cute... ^^;

    love to hear more from you B.L!



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    Re: Come Rescue Me

    A beautiful poem in need of beautiful punctuation. Don't forget your question marks, periods, commas, etc.

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    Re: Come Rescue Me

    @.@ *gasps* i am hearing something like a horse running closer...



    Hmmm this poem was nicely written... i like the way you start the poem... it's very beautiful...the wording style is nice too...

    Hmm but the ending just ruined a bit of the beauty to the poem...you mentioned the problem you have too...directly... try to use another way of stating them while concealing the true meaning behind.. that way it'll be much better ^^

    keep it up... this is a very nice piece ^^

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