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    Comfortably Numb

    As you sit there with voices echoing
    in your head , as faces fade in and out
    of your head they seem to be trying to
    help as you lay there relaxing letting your
    thoughts and feelings melt away.

    That little pin prick sends you back to the
    place where your comfortably numb , things
    just float and fade , nothing is coming into
    your brain as you smile letting those warm
    safe feelings cover your hole body now.

    They see you laying there , there voices
    so far away , nothing is really getting through
    but pleasure and joy as your blood flows so freely
    from the hole the needle left , and the blade opened,
    yes things are really fine now , so dont worry your
    where you want to be.

    The blade now dropped from where you cut that skin
    where the needle went in , not even that matters with
    how things seem so perfect , OK now lets get to the moment
    that you have worked so hard to get to , dont let your reality
    be brought back as things are only getting better for you now,
    just when you were being so down and life so unfair you made
    it go away once again but will this be the last time?

    Hazy feelings come over you as the feeling comes back
    and reality now smacks you , there was no blade ,just a
    fantasy how that feeling made you feel so alive , you now
    have to go through one more day of wishing thing's were
    sane in a world that is insane to you but normal for other's.

    The it comes again that urge to feel free and your
    reality to become only yours once more as they take
    you back to bring you to there reality not realising your already
    where you want to be.
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    I was trying to show how taking certain drugs can
    affect people though i have never did a drug or even
    inhaled this is what i hope sounds almost like what happens.
    the title of the poem is from a pink Floyd song but there words
    are my own , but if anyone feels that the title is border line infringement
    rename it to something that sounds right for the poem since i
    couldn't really think of anything.

    comments and suggestions are welcomed
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    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    It's okay! I like this poem! You are always such a good poet! Keep doing well my friend!



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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    A good poem, I really liked how you described it all... It showed it all like it is I guess- when you use drugs (not that I ever had) you feel good and forget about the world, but you have to go back to reality and it might seem even worse after feeling the drug taking away your pain...

    Nice poem indeed, made me think... good work Chris!

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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    I LOVE IT! It reminds me of Pink Flyod--especially the title. ^_^ Good job on this one. It's one of my favs from you.


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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    I really liked the poem. I've never done drugs either, but I've heard from people who have that they feel just like that till the high wears off then they're doing more to get the high back. Like eveyone else I love to feel good,but I'm not gonna do drugs to get there. Nice job sweetie.
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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    Yes! It was so excellent and inspireing! You did an excellent job on it Chris-sama!!!



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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    Blade? Im confused. if they were doing heroine its just a needle.
    But yeah! You covered the feeling of being high w/o ever actually
    ever been!

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    Re: Comfortable Numb

    Yea I was thinking....isn't that Pink Floyd?
    Great poem though....needles?
    Egh xD;;

    My veins hurt reading it though.....but you put much of feel into it.
    So I suppose it's what you wanted?


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