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    Re: Complications

    Ok... please forgive my criticism..
    I understood the general concept of the poem. But I thought it was bit wordy. I'm not saying I don't understand complex wording, but when you put too many larger words in one paragraph it becomes overly complex and in my opinion takes away from the feeling of the poem.
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    Re: Complications

    Do not worry about it i wont be upset by your comments or critism i just needed to listen what kind of thoughts you might have in this poem and you may want to also give any suggestions you may have in this poem and my question as well so feel free to comment anything.

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