Re: Confessions of the Heart
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Originally Posted by
BlueFox1
As I sit quietly thinking of what to say to you my thoughts begin swarming in my mind
The constant buzzing of word sounds like a hive of angry bees protecting their queen
Asking myself endless questions that forever seem to go unanswered in everyday life
Trapped inside my own heart frantically searching for the person I thought I once knew
I really like this stanza. It shows everything that someone does. Your words seem to put the perfect picture in my mind. I think everyone can say that they have atleast done this a time or two in their life.
The rest of the poem flowed very nicely and you got your message acrossed very well. Whoever she is, she's a lucky girl. Good job.
Re: Confessions of the Heart
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Originally Posted by
fireandice
I really like this stanza. It shows everything that someone does. Your words seem to put the perfect picture in my mind. I think everyone can say that they have atleast done this a time or two in their life.
The rest of the poem flowed very nicely and you got your message acrossed very well. Whoever she is, she's a lucky girl. Good job.
Thanks for the awesome comment and feedback fireandice! My whole intention in this poem was to put my feeling and emotions into it to try and present the perfect image in the readers mind! You are right we all go through something similar to this and I just had to let mine experince out weather it serves as a guide or to relate to others who've experinced this feeling!
Re: Confessions of the Heart
Very sweet poem bro. If guys read this to girls we'd melt right in their arms. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read your next one.
Re: Confessions of the Heart
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Originally Posted by
CherryBlossom18
Very sweet poem bro. If guys read this to girls we'd melt right in their arms. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read your next one.
Thanks for the feedback sis! I honestly know that no one in this forum will use my words as something to tell girls, quite frankly no one really reads what I have to say except the ones that are open minded enough to read and understand what I'm truly trying to say. You, Shini, Kimi, Soldat of Life, Sazzy and a couple of others always give me something to strive for and that I truly appreciate!