Confessions of a Prodigal

raja_psyche · Dec 29, 2006, 07:22 AM

Confessions of a Prodigal

Blinded with blood-tinged tears,
Embraced by existent fears
Walking along the rocky path
Unsure where it will lead.

Once, I drowned myself to riches
Laid myself on the bed of ill wealth
Surrounded by massive luxuries
Pampered self to the sins of the world.

I went to casinos and lotteries’ galore
Spent treasures to satisfy this bodily longing,
I wore diamonds and emeralds and rubies
Faking myself to be the queen!

Then there came the frightful day,
I woke up in a bed of nails;
Aching pain stabbed my head
My once known riches, they left me!

Now, guilt started to accompany
Life’s every single day,
Blaming my id personality
For being such a wasteful person I’d been.

>>>its been quite a long time since i last submitted a poem. Thanks for reading and comments and critiques are welcomed.

BlueFox1 · Dec 29, 2006, 08:36 AM

Nice poem raja! I like the title of the this poem it really drew me in and you did and excellent job of keeping me entertained through out the poem! I don't see any spelling or grammar errors! Overall outstanding job raja! Looking forward to reading more of you poems in the future! Oh and I'm still waiting for the next chapter of the fanfic!

*Kasai* · Dec 29, 2006, 11:07 AM

It read like a sotry. Awesome job. The last verse of the poem seems a bit out of place, hpwever. It doenst sit well with the flow.

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raja_psyche · Jan 06, 2007, 05:31 PM

Thanks Sensei-Kasai and Blue fox for reading and commenting on my poem. it is much appreciated. ^_^

Dec 29, 2006, 07:22 AM	#1 (permalink)
raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,497	Confessions of a Prodigal Confessions of a Prodigal Blinded with blood-tinged tears, Embraced by existent fears Walking along the rocky path Unsure where it will lead. Once, I drowned myself to riches Laid myself on the bed of ill wealth Surrounded by massive luxuries Pampered self to the sins of the world. I went to casinos and lotteries’ galore Spent treasures to satisfy this bodily longing, I wore diamonds and emeralds and rubies Faking myself to be the queen! Then there came the frightful day, I woke up in a bed of nails; Aching pain stabbed my head My once known riches, they left me! Now, guilt started to accompany Life’s every single day, Blaming my id personality For being such a wasteful person I’d been. >>>its been quite a long time since i last submitted a poem. Thanks for reading and comments and critiques are welcomed. __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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Dec 29, 2006, 08:36 AM	#2 (permalink)
BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Re: Confessions of a Prodigal Nice poem raja! I like the title of the this poem it really drew me in and you did and excellent job of keeping me entertained through out the poem! I don't see any spelling or grammar errors! Overall outstanding job raja! Looking forward to reading more of you poems in the future! Oh and I'm still waiting for the next chapter of the fanfic! __________________
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Dec 29, 2006, 11:07 AM	#3 (permalink)
Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: Confessions of a Prodigal It read like a sotry. Awesome job. The last verse of the poem seems a bit out of place, hpwever. It doenst sit well with the flow. And check the clan for recent updates. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Jan 06, 2007, 05:31 PM	#4 (permalink)
raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,497	Re: Confessions of a Prodigal Thanks Sensei-Kasai and Blue fox for reading and commenting on my poem. it is much appreciated. ^_^ __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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