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    Confessions of a Prodigal

    Confessions of a Prodigal


    Blinded with blood-tinged tears,
    Embraced by existent fears
    Walking along the rocky path
    Unsure where it will lead.

    Once, I drowned myself to riches
    Laid myself on the bed of ill wealth
    Surrounded by massive luxuries
    Pampered self to the sins of the world.

    I went to casinos and lotteries’ galore
    Spent treasures to satisfy this bodily longing,
    I wore diamonds and emeralds and rubies
    Faking myself to be the queen!

    Then there came the frightful day,
    I woke up in a bed of nails;
    Aching pain stabbed my head
    My once known riches, they left me!

    Now, guilt started to accompany
    Life’s every single day,
    Blaming my id personality
    For being such a wasteful person I’d been.


    >>>its been quite a long time since i last submitted a poem. Thanks for reading and comments and critiques are welcomed.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Confessions of a Prodigal

    Nice poem raja! I like the title of the this poem it really drew me in and you did and excellent job of keeping me entertained through out the poem! I don't see any spelling or grammar errors! Overall outstanding job raja! Looking forward to reading more of you poems in the future! Oh and I'm still waiting for the next chapter of the fanfic!

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    Re: Confessions of a Prodigal

    It read like a sotry. Awesome job. The last verse of the poem seems a bit out of place, hpwever. It doenst sit well with the flow.

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    Re: Confessions of a Prodigal

    Thanks Sensei-Kasai and Blue fox for reading and commenting on my poem. it is much appreciated. ^_^

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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