Convict

raja_psyche · Apr 21, 2008, 07:23 PM

Convict

What kind of life am I living?
Locking myself in my room to sleep,
Singing myself a lullaby.
All this time, I am lonely.

How did I end up like this?
Mind is inflicted with confusion
Heart is deprived of “happy” emotion
All this time, I am unhappy.

Who would care to save me?
Tears kept rolling from my eyes
As my psyche is filled with misery
All this time, I am in agony.

Where would I go now?
A memoir of yesterday haunts me.
My present remains to be gloomy;
All this time, I want to be free!

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Thanks for reading. Comments and critiques are mostly appreciated.
The weather and the summer vacation inspired me... ^^

PhoenixSara · Apr 22, 2008, 01:19 PM

this is so sad, melancholic but nicely put together. i wonder if someone made youthink this way...

mere · Apr 22, 2008, 02:19 PM

I think this poem is full of misery, but for some reason i seemed to enjoy it. The feelings of regreat and meloncoly filled my mind as i read through it. I like poems that actualy give off emotions

raja_psyche · Apr 22, 2008, 06:26 PM

@PhoenixSara: Thanks for the comment. You guessed it right, someone made me feel this way (that was before ^^). I felt like a convict in his judgment... =0_o=

@mere: I am glad that you enjoyed reading my poem ^^. hihi, I am an emotional kind of writer. I do find inspiration on various emotions. ^^

*RayMe* · Apr 30, 2008, 04:19 AM

This... is a very good poem..

been a long time since i last read any poem and im glad to have read this..

its worth it to read.. wait.. its more! ^^

First of all is the way of the words are used... the poem is quite short and yet descriptive... The flow was good and the mood on this poem.. made me read it slow thanks to the effect... ^^ good job on this one! Keep it up..

tifa4cloud · Apr 30, 2008, 04:30 AM

wow that poem was great, probably one of the best ive read in along time, careful ray it seems you have some comp on your hands

anyways keep up the great work, hope to read more greatness from you in the future

raja_psyche · May 01, 2008, 02:59 AM

@ Rayme: Yesh, it's been a long time since I made a poem buddy *I guess this doll needs to have some dusting done*. Nowadays, I really try to create poems that are short and yet gives some kind of imagery ^^. Thanks for the comment ^^

@tifa4cloud: I am really glad that you liked my poem ^^. Yesh, I'll try to do my best too. =^_^=

Apr 21, 2008, 07:23 PM	#1 (permalink)
raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,477	Convict Convict What kind of life am I living? Locking myself in my room to sleep, Singing myself a lullaby. All this time, I am lonely. How did I end up like this? Mind is inflicted with confusion Heart is deprived of “happy” emotion All this time, I am unhappy. Who would care to save me? Tears kept rolling from my eyes As my psyche is filled with misery All this time, I am in agony. Where would I go now? A memoir of yesterday haunts me. My present remains to be gloomy; All this time, I want to be free! >>>>>>>> Thanks for reading. Comments and critiques are mostly appreciated. The weather and the summer vacation inspired me... ^^ __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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Apr 22, 2008, 01:19 PM	#2 (permalink)
PhoenixSara Upcoming Legend Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: The deepest Abyss of the Ocean Posts: 578 Thanks: 22 Thanked 21 Times in 21 Posts Credits: 21,252	Re: Convict this is so sad, melancholic but nicely put together. i wonder if someone made youthink this way... __________________ Angels dare to go where devils don't dare to tread. Clan Rainstorm 2nd Company, Kunoichi Leader http://animalwonders.b1.jcink.com/index.php?act=idx
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Apr 22, 2008, 02:19 PM	#3 (permalink)
mere Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: in thought Posts: 104 Thanks: 4 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 6,384	Re: Convict I think this poem is full of misery, but for some reason i seemed to enjoy it. The feelings of regreat and meloncoly filled my mind as i read through it. I like poems that actualy give off emotions __________________ um....ah.....hi..
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Apr 22, 2008, 06:26 PM	#4 (permalink)
raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,477	Re: Convict @PhoenixSara: Thanks for the comment. You guessed it right, someone made me feel this way (that was before ^^). I felt like a convict in his judgment... =0_o= @mere: I am glad that you enjoyed reading my poem ^^. hihi, I am an emotional kind of writer. I do find inspiration on various emotions. ^^ __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,589 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 58,560	Re: Convict This... is a very good poem.. been a long time since i last read any poem and im glad to have read this.. its worth it to read.. wait.. its more! ^^ First of all is the way of the words are used... the poem is quite short and yet descriptive... The flow was good and the mood on this poem.. made me read it slow thanks to the effect... ^^ good job on this one! Keep it up.. __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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Apr 30, 2008, 04:30 AM	#6 (permalink)
tifa4cloud Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2006 Location: ireland Posts: 166 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,546	Re: Convict wow that poem was great, probably one of the best ive read in along time, careful ray it seems you have some comp on your hands anyways keep up the great work, hope to read more greatness from you in the future __________________ thank you equinn
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May 01, 2008, 02:59 AM	#7 (permalink)
raja_psyche Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In the Pearl of the Orient Posts: 393 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,477	Re: Convict @ Rayme: Yesh, it's been a long time since I made a poem buddy I guess this doll needs to have some dusting done. Nowadays, I really try to create poems that are short and yet gives some kind of imagery ^^. Thanks for the comment ^^ @tifa4cloud: I am really glad that you liked my poem ^^. Yesh, I'll try to do my best too. =^_^= __________________ Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
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