it was really good except for the last line i didnt really get. and the flow was kinda choppy at the beginning at one point i didnt think you were going make your standing clear but it was really good^^
keep up the good work =]
Well where do i start to tell you the story,
Of one man and his promised affection to me.
Yes he did tell me he'd spend his forever,
yet as he gave his love to me,
someone came in to be his mistress
someone who claimed to be his baby.
While he lied to her never saying a word about me,
that I knew all about her.
I hung on to every word.
Of a promise of one true love,
of a promise of forever.
Of the promise that i'd be his love,
till his forever was through.
How will I tell her I was the future,
and she was a copy.
When in his deepest pain,
It was I who made him whole again.
While the copies freaked out.
I was called by his family,
it was my words that calmed him,
it was me who found him again.
Stop saying you love him,
that you truly knew his soul.
None of us ever really knew him.
for all you know none of us really had his heart.
Last edited by PhoenixSara; Jan 21, 2009 at 01:16 PM. Reason: **
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it was really good except for the last line i didnt really get. and the flow was kinda choppy at the beginning at one point i didnt think you were going make your standing clear but it was really good^^
keep up the good work =]
I'm the best you'll ever have because i am that f*ing AMA-zing chic who can stand on her own d*n feet and becasue of you I am the GreatestThank you so much SasuraiHell and Gwen
Well a promise can so easily be broken.... Unfortunately. But really good poem Phoenix
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