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    Could Not Say.

    How It went so wrong...
    ... I can not grasp.
    Seemingly exposed,
    what laid beneath a smoky mask.

    Both my heart and tongue are tied.
    Still, for air I gasp.
    Why do I seek answers...
    ....to questions I can not ask?

    In glances passed from curious eyes.
    A message can relay.
    Yet mystery still stays in tact.
    There is no other way.

    If tragedy's cipher can be broken.
    If broken souls can sway.
    Then this will be but a memory,
    of all I could not say.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Could Not Say.

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Yet mystery still stays in tact.
    I hope this isn't just a typo.

    I love the wonky rhyme scheme you have going on, I actually had to go back and read over all the lines to make sure I wasn't just missing the rhyme.

    This seems rather hopeless, like the dreams of a small, poor child living without a voice :C
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: Could Not Say.

    no... It may not make sense... but it isn't a typo. It's mystery, not being broken. Y'know?

    This seems rather hopeless, like the dreams of a small, poor child living without a voice :C
    Wow! I'm so pleased that that's what you got from this! That is pretty much the feeling, behind the situation, which inspired me to write this.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Could Not Say.

    I agree with the other person. It's very sad and very well written. I enjoy this a lot even though it makes me wanna cry today.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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