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    Arrow Could it possibly be...

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    Seconds pass by and the clock's ticking away;
    Twisting and turning, not knowing what to say.
    Hardly eating, hardly sleeping, often staring the hours away;
    Could it possibly be that my heart has given it's sway?

    Feeling numb, drained, and drenched in the cold rain;
    Absorbing the sadness, I beg someone to heal this pain.
    Then you came with the warmth this heart has been longing;
    Could it possibly be you that I've always been searching?

    The traces of him leaving, had left scars of me pleading;
    Clearance of this sorrow, I have always been waiting.
    Still you're here with that sweetness to my ears;
    Could it possibly be you, after all these years?

    This weeping heart that was stabbed by a knife;
    You've gladly given blood, breathing a new life.
    Relishing the passionate rush that is in my veins;
    Could it possibly be you that would make this anguish wane?

    Comforting grace, you have always blessed upon me;
    Now feeling blind, for not being able to see.
    Left in the shadows, now enlightened by your presence;
    Could it possibly be you that fills my life's lacking essence?

    Could it possibly be... could it possibly be;
    These questions have always bothered me.
    Come up to me and make me blissful by your 'yes';
    So now my heart could have its final rest.

    ~~~

    uhm... this is my second poem to make and post in AO... ^^;; i just felt like writing one... i hope i've improved though... ^^;;;;; i think the end part sucks. it just kinda stopped... suggestions are really much needed... lol.. thanks... ^^

    edit: lol... me and my typo on the title... haha... XD
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    Re: Could it possible be...

    wow this poem is a bloody one, nice one machiru726.

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    Re: Could it possible be...

    ohhhh... ^o^ thanks a lot Ketaro!! call me Pam, if you wish... ^^ it's easier to type...

    thanks again for the input! ^-^

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    Re: Could it possible be...

    wow... um that was kool i guess

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    Re: Could it possible be...

    This weeping heart that was stabbed by a knife
    Thats deep.
    I enjoied reading your poem Keep it up you have a talent..

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    Thanks Shatteredpain and Fighter! ^_^ lol... maybe i do exagerrated that part a bit... hehe... ^^;;;

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    wow that is scary but still good job


    Thank you soooo much equinn for leting me us this pic of your!!!!!

    This is a cute little clip:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PrZQIayUnbA

    My favorite song:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8frvSHvlzSM

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    You're really good. Keep on going !

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